Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Wisdom, motivation, and emotion

Heading casing

Hi Abiral Shrestha. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 31 October 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed) User name removed – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings 3. Overview Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided - but keep it brief and move detail into subsequent sections Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Move external links to academic citations from main body into the references (use dois) Promising balance of theory and research Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Use Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented and captioned The figure caption(s) should include Figure X. ... The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) Well done on creating and uploading your own image! Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 6. Learning feature No comment 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? All references need to be cited in the text Only include references which have been accessed and read Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation include hyperlinked dois 8. Resources The provided resources are too general. They need to be more relevant and specific to the topic. See also Not provided in the correct section Also link to related book chapters Include source in brackets after link (e.g., (Wikipedia) or (Book chapter, year) for Wikiversity book chapters) Use alphabetical order External links Include source in brackets after link 9. User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution 1 discussion post on UCLearn and 1 image upload. The other types of contributions are making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current) comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) Note that direct links to evidence need to be added to receive credit (e.g., to X posts). To do this for Wikiversity edits: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 30 August 2024 (UTC)

Chapter feedback

Hello, I’ve just finished reading your chapter. The topic is really interesting, and you’ve included lots of great information about theories related to motivation, emotion and wisdom. I just have a few suggestions that you can think about regarding your chapter.

The first thing I noticed was that you should reference more frequently throughout each section of your chapter. Even if the same author has been used for consecutive sentences, referencing each sentence shows the reader where you have gotten each piece of information from and makes your chapter appear more reliable to the reader. I also don’t think that you need to include embedded links for each author throughout your chapter, just embedded links in the reference list.

Although your chapter contains great research on the relationship between wisdom and motivation, and wisdom and emotion, to address the focus question of your chapter more specifically you could also include a section on the relationship between wisdom, motivation and emotion together. The focus question specifically asks about the “motivational-emotional aspects of wisdom”, and I don’t think has been specifically answered in your chapter. Below are some resources I found that you may want to read and include in your chapter to bridge this gap.

I would also recommend including a second case study box towards the end of the chapter, where the reader can relate back to the scenario you presented at the beginning and see if they have learned the answers to some of the case study problems. This could be a great way for the reader to consolidate what they have learned from reading your chapter.

Kunzmann, U. (2004). Approaches to a Good Life: The Emotional‐Motivational Side to Wisdom. 504–517. https://doi.org/10.1002/9780470939338.ch31.

Etezadi, S., & Pushkar, D. (2012). Why are Wise People Happier? An Explanatory Model of Wisdom and Emotional Well-Being in Older Adults. Journal of Happiness Studies, 14(3), 929–950. https://doi.org/10.1007/s10902-012-9362-2.

‌Dong, M., Weststrate, N. M., & Fournier, M. A. (2023). Thirty Years of Psychological Wisdom Research: What We Know About the Correlates of an Ancient Concept. Perspectives on Psychological Science, 18(4), 778-811. https://doi.org/10.1177/17456916221114096.

Overall, well done so far!--U3236447 (discuss • contribs) 04:57, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Good work Abiral! your book chapter is very well written and structured. Only a few things I would suggest regarding certain aspects of your book.

Firstly, labelling your figures accordingly, and referring to them in the relevant sections they're featured in, should assist in creating a better flow both visually and written. By doing so, each figure is strategically ordered in relation to the context of your book and the corresponding section. On that note as well, it may be beneficial for the readability of your book chapter with images and figures that relate to your topic and what is being said in the discussion. However, these are only minor adjustments that contribute to better readability and visual presentation of your book chapter.

In terms of other improvements that can be made to visual representation, consider removing the feature boxes and assessment guidelines throughout your chapter that are not relevant or apart of your written content. To my understanding, these featureboxes and sections are only there to guide how the assessment is completed. Since the chapter is virtually finished, these guidelines have served their purpose of shaping your approach and each section of the chapter.

Aside from these adjustments to the presentation of your chapter, the written component is very well structured and dissects your topic quite well. Excellent work on the assessment! Best of luck :) Sebastian Siakimotu (discuss • contribs) 21:30, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is to adhere to the maximum word count, provide better review of the best psychological theory and research about the topic, to use APA style, and to acknowledge use of genAI. I suspect that some of this chapter is based on unacknowledged use of genAI content; if so, it violates academic integrity principles Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Move embedded external links to academic articles into the References section, include links as dois, and provide APA style citation to the article in the main body text Move embedded external links to non-peer-reviewed sources into the External links section Over the maximum word count. Content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. This chapter "beats around the bush" with historical/religious background before tackling the target topic For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2024%2FWisdom%2C_motivation%2C_and_emotion&diff=2677497&oldid=2676887[ these copyedits] Overview Solid Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well The focus questions are reasonably clear and relevant Theory A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds somewhat on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles, however most of the links are general rather than specific to the psychological nature of the topic Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Not counted for marking purposes due to being over the maximum word count Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are several aspects which are below professional standard. For example, remove generic template material (I fixed this). Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation – more info APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Tables Use APA style for captions (see example) Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, talics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use poor APA style (7th ed.). To improve: Do not include author first name or initials If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Move peer reviewed links into the References section as dois and provide APA style citations Move non-peer reviewed citations into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed work References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois (fixed) Learning features Insufficient use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One figure One table Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~2 logged contributions with direct links to evidence ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to I've moved the image upload to Wikimedia Commons

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 31 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) A basic context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes insufficient use of one or more examples The presentation provides basic practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides an very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides reasonably good take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was basic Recording volume was low in some sections Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:36, 9 November 2024 (UTC)