Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Vasopressin and motivation

Heading casing

Hi U3012923. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development ~~~~

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment Use bullet points or a numbered list 4. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Promising use of one ore more scenarios/examples/case studies Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) 8. Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed 9. User page Very good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 03). Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:02, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising but insufficient chapter. It has the potential to be an excellent chapter if it was more complete and polished. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) Move embedded external links to academic articles into the References section, include links as dois, and provide APA style citation to the article in the main body text Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image There are two scenarios/case studies. Combine or move one into another section to keep the Overview focused. Explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory A promising range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Promising depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Why does vasopressin have motivational effects? Why the gender differences? Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Promising review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Promising integration between theory and research Conclusion Good summary and conclusion Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Develop the bullet point statements into full sentences and paragraphs Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold) Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of affect vs. effect APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use good APA style: Incorrect link for Cuzzo et al. (2023) Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Learning features Insufficient use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Reasonably good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Insufficient use of external links in the "External links" section Provide the 3 to 6 most relevant external resources about this topic 1st link is incorrect Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:12, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario) A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory Why does vasopressin have sex differences? The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion Provide a conclusion slide which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Reasonably goodintonation The narration could benefit from further scripting and/or practice Audio recording quality was basic Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides with inset webcam The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers decide whether or not to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:41, 5 November 2024 (UTC)