Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Yoga and emotional regulation

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Remove Introduction - could be renamed or content could be moved Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Currently section 5 (How can yoga help regulate strong emotional states?) is the most promising section in terms of addressing the sub-title question using relevant theory and research. Probably "strong" isn't needed. Overview Good development Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem an image an example or case study Open-ended focus questions tends to work better than closed-ended questions The first focus question could be improved by being more focused around the target topic Key points Promising development of key points for each section Insufficient use of citations, so it is not clear how this chapter is using and synthesising the best available psychological theory and research on the topic - this is a key area for further development There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented The figure caption is quite brief Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view Learning feature A promising table is presented. However, think carefully about the content. Such a table probably already exists on Wikipedia and can be linked to. Ideally, the learning features in this article could concentrate on the relation between how yoga can support emotion regulation. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies and/or quiz questions References 4/6 references provided; 3 of which are academic/peer-reviewed This is an area that needs development - what are the best academic peer-reviewed resources about this topic - identify these sources and integrate them into the chapter For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Very good Formatting can be improved - I've adjusted the first Wikipedia and the first Wikiversity link with the suggested format External links Very good I've adjusted the formatting for the first link - apply to others User page Basic description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:56, 16 September 2023 (UTC)

There is some great foundational imagery and information on this page, though perhaps some more depth is needed. I have also seen your mention of neuroplasticity. Do you think it could be expanded for the reader to learn more about how and why the brain adapts and changes depending on its environment and what it is exposed to? --MojoHides (discuss • contribs) 05:22, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes some good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. It could be improved by focusing more strongly on the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic. Sub-title was incorrect; now fixed Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engage reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The chapter could be improved by providing less general background about yoga and more indepth exploration of the psychological science about how yoga can affect emotion regulation A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in some places (e.g., see the tags) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers Figures Figures are very well captioned; ideally, connect to the topic (yoga and emotion regulation) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use good APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct placement of full-stops References use poor APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Excellent/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:58, 21 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it lacks sufficient synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview Remove opening screen display An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario) Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation does not adequately the topic There is too much stand-alone material about emotional regulation and yoga as separate topics and too little about their relationship There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Slow down and leave longer pauses between sentences. This will help viewers to cognitively digest the spoken information as it is being presented, before moving on to the next point. Reasonably good intonation The narration could benefit from further scripting and practice Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is poorly matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:28, 22 November 2023 (UTC)