Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Episodic memory and planning

Initial suggestions

@Maheenusman: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there have been two previous attempts at this topic, so check out those chapters and the feedback on the 2019 chapter and the feedback on the 2021 chapter.
• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Memory
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Planning
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:53, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:15, 18 September 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Remove author name – authorship is as per the page's editing history Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Check and correct grammar (e.g., missing question marks) and fix formatting (e.g., remove colons at end of headings) Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Promising, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Well developed Consider using a single evocative scenario at the very start to attract reader attention. This scenario could be put into a feature box with an image. Other examples can be used in the main chapter content. Well developed focus questions that connect with the main headings Consider putting the focus questions into a feature box Key points This is already ~3,500 words; so there will need to be some rationalisation to fit within the maximum word count. There is a good structure, but will need to be ruthlessly disciplined about only including material directly relevant to addressing the sub-title. Use Australian spelling (e.g., ize -> ise) I recommend abbreviating the "What is episodic memory?" but provided embedded links to further information. The bulk of the chapter should focus on EM and planning (theory and research; with examples). "The role of episodic memory in planning" section is the most promising/relevant. Consider using sub-headings to help organise the material. Consider adding learning features (e.g., embedded links, images, etc.). Include a balance of theory, research, and examples. Consider how to improve the linkage between "The role of episodic memory in planning" section and the following section. Curious why this focuses specifically on the hippocampus and not the brain more generally (e.g., with a section on the hippocampus, a section on pre-frontal cortext etc.) Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Avoid overcapitalisation (e.g., Episodic -> episodic) Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Consider how to split up a long paragraph Consider specifically addressing each of the focus questions and the take-home messages Figure A relevant figure is presented with a caption which is somewhat descriptive/connective with text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Consider using more images Excellent use of quiz. Consider splitting the quiz items across the relevant sections. Decapitalise. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also OK Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links OK Decapitalise Include source in brackets after link User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution Twitter link was not direct Two indirect Wikiversity edits If adding the second or subsequent link to a page, create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:15, 18 September 2023 (UTC)

Inconsistency with figures

Hi, I noticed some inconsistencies regarding your figures. you have 2x Figure 2 and both are not written the same way i.e., Figure 2 and Figure 2:

James mentioned so long as they are written same throughout then that should be fine. I recommend putting them either in bold or italics i.e., Figure 1: ...

Thanks

Thrainn U3217955 (discuss • contribs) 23:23, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter Some aspects are excellent, other aspects are basic or problematic Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Promising but underdeveloped Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario in a feature box Include a matching image Describes the problem Abbreviate and move detail into subsequent sections Partially developed focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/*) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Reasonably good use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic to reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Good use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Reasonably good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of case studies or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~1 logged, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:33, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview There's a couple of blank seconds before the presentation starts This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation This presentation has a basic introduction Consider using an example or explaining why the topic is important Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one example The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion Add a title to the Conclusion slide The conclusion provides a basic summary The presentation could be strengthened by providing take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) The topic was not about emotion; it is a motivation topic I didn't understand the relevance of the images on the Conclusion slide Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed, although it does sound a lot it is being read from a script rather than conversational Audio recording quality was very good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images. However, the relevance of some images wasn't obvious. Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:06, 15 November 2023 (UTC)