Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Comprehensive action determination model

Word Count

Hi @Rocxie:, I was just reviewing how other people were going on their book chapters and I noticed your chapter looked great but was very content heavy. I thought I would remind you that although there is no minimum length the max is 4,000 words (including references!) There are some handy tips to how you can reduce your word count on the Motivation_and_emotion/Assessment/Chapter assessment page. And there are instructions on how to install a google chrome extension word counter. I hope this helps. Best of luck!

Initial suggestions

@Rocxie: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Environment
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:03, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:14, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising development - but should focused on CADM and motivation Overview Looks like unacknowledged genAI material? Start with a short scenario in a feature box Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Focus questions need to more focused on unpacking the sub-title Key points The plan is over the book chapter word count - and it hasn't been written yet! So, obviously this is over the top Is this from a genAI engine? If so, this needs to be declared in the edit summary, otherwise it is plagiarism No citations :( Avoid providing too much background information and focus on the question in the sub-title Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption isn't clearly related to CADM Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, table(s) etc. Customise quiz questions around the take-home messages in response to each focus question References None Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Resources See also Not developed External links Excellent Not developed User page Not created – see Tutorial 02 Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:14, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter It is possible that a lot of this content is AI-generated without appropriate acknowledgement Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. Earlier warnings about this appear not to have been heeded. Everything from "Cultural Norms and Decision-Making Preferences" onward ignored for marking purposes. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter There are no edit summaries. There are a mixture of writing styles which may be consistent with this chapter not having a single author. There is a possibility that some of this content has been AI-generated without appropriate acknowledgement. The chapter fails at the primary task of providing plain English explanations of theoretical concepts with practical examples. Key content lacks sufficient citation. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed/Solid/Reasonably good/Basic/Underdeveloped Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explain how this scenario relates to the CADM A general explanation of motivation is offered Be more targeted - explain how this relates to the CADM The focus question(s) are somewhat tangential to the topic which is "What is the CADM and how can it be applied to understanding human motivation?" The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory The chapter lacks a sufficient basic explanation of CADM for a lay audience; this may indicate a lack of understanding of the model if it can't be explained in simple terms. There seems to be a mixture of writing styles used in this chapter (e.g., the key points section is in first person and lacks any citations). Strive for a single, integrated voice. The connection between the theory of planned behaviour and CADM is not made Insufficient as a cogent, integrated overview of how this theory applies to motivation Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Too much depth is provided; a lack of capacity to zoom out and communicate the key ideas Insufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of practical examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research A few studies are cited, but overall insufficient review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident; mainly due to lack of sufficient citation throughout. The citations are primarily to a few individual studies rather than embedded throughout. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on uncited theory than on research Conclusion Excellent/Very good/Reasonably good/Basic summary and conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Summarise key points Clear take-home message(s) Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic to insufficient, mainly due to mixed voices, overuse of bullet-points, being over the maximum word, lacking sufficient citation, and not sufficiently answering the question using an integration of the best available psychological theory and research, with easy to understand examples, and practical take-home messages. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full paragraph format Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing - why has earlier advice been ignored? Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., CADM), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Very limited list of references; poor literature search References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Insufficient use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very basic use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Very basic use of feature box(es) The quiz questions are overly detailed/complex. Identify the take-home messages for the focus questions and ask quiz questions about these. Basic use of case studies or examples No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Very basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:48, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it fails to communicate an adequate understanding of the best psychological theory and research about the CADM and it is over the maximum time limit The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is very brief displayed The sub-title font is very small and fuzzy - too difficult to read Narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation provides an insufficient explanation of relevant psychological theory Several studies are described but there is insufficient explanation of how they illustrate the key psychological principles involved in CADM The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Provide practical, easy to understand information Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes very basic use of narrated audio. It largely consists of reading out the text on the slides. There is little evidence of understanding. The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The webcam is very shaky - suggest using a tripod The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:04, 7 November 2023 (UTC)