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Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Add description about self
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.
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Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided
There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about id, ego, super-ego). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
There was no discussion about how sublimation can be fostered (part of the sub-title)
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"
Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text but don't enhance meaning
Layout
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
Provide more descriptive headings (e.g., consider using a brief description of the key point for the section titled "*"?)
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10)
Figures
Figures are captioned
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
Citations use correct APA style
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
No use of quiz(zes)
Limited use of case studies or examples
No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Include sources in parentheses. Use bullet-points per Tutorial 02.
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Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
The presentation in insufficiently focused on the target topic
The presentation mostly focuses on the id, ego, and superego, with little mention of sublimation and how it can be fostered. The initial example and the last 10 seconds (2:50 to 3:00) has some focus on sublimation.
An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic
The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory
The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research
The presentation includes citations
The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
The audio communication is hesitant in some places — could benefit from further practice
The presentation lacks the polish that comes with practice
Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content)
The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access
There are minor improvements to the introduction, including improvement to one of the focus questions
Learning features: A couple of inter-wiki links to Wikipedia and Wikiversity pages have been added
A basic attempt has been made to better address the question of how sublimation can be fostered, but a limited understanding of fostering sublimation as a mature defensive mechanism (compared to immature defensive mechanisms) is still evident
There was some minor expansion of description of two research studies
Written style
Use 3rd perspective perspective instead of 1st person perspective