Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Mudita

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Not developed Key points Not developed Figure Not developed References Not developed Resources Not developed

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Heading casing

Hi Inandonit365. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:15, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview A clearer definition or example of mudita could improve this section Basic focus question(s); consider expanding Theory – Breadth Basic use of psychological theory about this topic This chapter could be improved by comparing and contrasting mudita to other social emotions such as empathy, compassion, compersion, schadenfreude, jealousy/envy, love, gratitude etc. A useful example to explore might be compersion in polyamorous relationships Over-reliance on Nelson-Jones (2004) Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Basic summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent/very good/good/basic/insufficient Very good/ use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/One/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section See Tutorial 02 for how to format links Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:09, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation style is good However, there is insufficient psychological perspective Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established An outline with focus questions is presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic Overly focused on a religious rather than psychological perspective Perhaps consider connections with related psychological constructs such as empathy, jealousy, loving-kindness meditation etc. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is clear and well paced Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:41, 8 November 2022 (UTC)