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Insufficient use of more specific psychological theory about this topic
There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
This chapter starts to address the topic with the section titled "How does culture influence us and our emotions?" (which is too little, too late)
Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2]
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
Grammar
Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
APA style
Direct quotes need double quotation marks and page numbers – even better, write in your own words
Figures
Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Citations and links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section
Basic use of image(s). Increase image size for diagrams so that they are easier to read.
Very good use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes). The questions should be about the take-away messages for the role of culture in these emotions.
Basic of case studies or examples
Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
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Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good
Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access
A link from the book chapter is provided
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
Approximately 1700 words have been added; the chapter is now well over the maximum word count, so the last ~900 words have been ignored for marking purposes (i.e., from Conclusion onwards)
Overview
Figure 1 was added or moved into the Overview
Somewhat improved
Grammatical and written expression errors
Focus questions lacked sufficient clarity and focus; have revised
Written expression
People is often a better choice of word than individuals
The title and sub-title were correct, but this edit made it incorrect; so, I've fixed it
Colons were incorrectly added to the headings; these have been fixed
Direct quotes are over-used, especially from non-peer-reviewed sources. Consider expressing ideas in your own words.
Over-reliance on non-peer-reviewed academic sources
Grammar
Numerous grammatical errors remain or have been introduced
Use serial commas, per APA style
that vs. who
Use double quotation marks (rather than single quotation marks) to introduce a new word or phrase
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st person perspective
Citations
Use APA style (e.g., (Muris, Meesters, 2014) is not APA style; neither is (Lehman,et al 2003); nor (Sabiston, C.M, Castonguay, A.L, 2014))