Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Commitment bias

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:46, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Link provided to Instagram (private) Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view References Excellent For APA referencing style, check and correct: page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Good Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Also link to related book chapters External links Good Use sentence casing Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:46, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because: The presentation lacks explicit summary of relevant research Meta-data and licensing is lacking A conclusion with take-away messages in response to focus questions is lacking Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation discusses CB and some relevant theories in a basic way An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no explicit use of relevant psychological research Use APA style for citations (e.g., et al. when 3 or more authors) The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Narration tone sounds bored or tired Audio communication is well paced Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Audio recording quality was basic. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time Consider using bullet-points to break the text up and making it easier to read The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:09, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2022/Commitment_bias&type=revision&diff=2452203&oldid=2446725&diffmode=source[ these copyedits] Overview Underdeveloped Overview Provide a more elaborate explanation of the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Key findings Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Summarise key points Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some sentences are overly long (unnecessarily wordy). Strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. At the very least, consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') [1] APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:\ Do not include author first name or initials If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Insufficient use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One use of image(s) Make image larger so that it is easier to read No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Move external links to the external link section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~1 logged minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:06, 19 November 2022 (UTC)