Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Autonomous sensory meridian response and emotion

Suggestions for this chapter

Hello! This is a really interesting topic and I cant wait to read what you find on it when its completed. Some suggestions I would make to help enhance your chapter is to use hyperlinks to relevant concepts and theories. I also found this really interesting article on ASMR and the changes in affect and physiology which may be helpful for your chapter. Hope this helps! https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC6010208/ U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 02:10, 13 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly worded Formatting fixed User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter. Rename link to make it more user-friendly (see Tutorial 02). Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Basic, 2-level heading structure – would benefit from further development Key points Basic development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is not presented References None Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:27, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 17 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it is too brief, so doesn't sufficiently cover relevant theory, research, and application. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Start by explaining what ASMR is to someone who is unfamiliar. For example, try explaining it to a 6 year old. For example, what is: Autonomous? Sensory? Meridian? Response? Include examples Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Build more strongly on other *-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/*) Theory – Depth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory Tables and/or lists are used to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research What % of people experience positive changes due to ASMR? What % find it unpleasant? etc. Greater detail from key studies would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Where research is discussed, it is somewhat integrated with theory Conclusion Basic summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Heading structure in under-developed Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., ASMR), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10) Figures Three out of the four figures were deleted because they violated copyright Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Problematic use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution Use a numbered list ~1 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence 3 images were uploaded, but have now been deleted due to copyright violation

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 17 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation Overview Cool idea to use ASMR at start, but it was very quiet (barely/marginally audible), which meant that it didn't really "work" as an engaging example An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes promising use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is well paced Good intonation Audio recording quality was OK. The Overall volume level was very quiet (it sounded OK with everything turned up to maximum). Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:39, 22 November 2022 (UTC)