Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Lucid dream facilitation

Heading casing

Hi ShamusBrodie. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed) 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement The planned headings seemed to be structured around single citations; instead provide synthesis and integration across the best psychological science on this topic Remove acronym#Noun|acronyms from headings Remove citations from headings Remove trailing colons from headings Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Usually an "Introduction" section isn't necessary because the Overview should do this job and, if there is additional detail, consider using more more descriptive heading(s) 3. Overview Does this section include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section Does this plan include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Good use of citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) presented and captioned The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Well done on creating and uploading your own image! – this can also be listed as a social contribution 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Consider use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Promising use of quiz question(s) Focus quiz question(s) on the take-home messages Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References OK. Proofreading and correction needed. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Only include references which have been accessed and read Check and correct APA referencing style: Move non-peer-reviewed sources to external links Include volume and issue numbers make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic 8. Resources See also OK Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link (e.g., (Wikipedia) or (Book chapter, year) for Wikiversity book chapters) Use alphabetical order External links OK Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link Use alphabetical order 9. User page Basic Very brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided Rename the link to the book chapter to make it more user-friendly (see Tutorial 02) 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current) comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms such as the UCLearn discussion forum or on X using the #emot24

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:38, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is greater reliance on your own reading and writing and less on genAI content Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims; in some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Sub-headings removed Lacks development Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Briefly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon; provide more detail Reads like poorly written genAI material The focus questions are clear Theory A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds somewhat on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use more tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Reads like generic genAI content Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are aspects which are below professional standard Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections The structure may be overly complicated (i.e., too many sections overall) Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics, bold, and/or change in font size) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate about concepts in your own words Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to the Figure in a more relevant way in the main text using APA style Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Basic use of learning features Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Add more links Insufficient use of external links in the "External links" section Include sources in parentheses after the link ChatGPT link broken (removed). See genAI guidelines for how to use and acknowledge. Add more links Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, mostly minor contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks for the useful image upload

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:06, 30 October 2024 (UTC)