Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Bottom-line mentality and motivation

Initial suggestions

@Biancaguina: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Leadership
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Productivity
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Work
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:09, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

Case study

Hi @Biancaguina - you've done a really great job!

You mentioned that you were looking into case studies - You might be able to look at the way HP approached leadership. You can find a link here to a forbes article here which speaks about it a bit more in detail - but in short, when they split in 2015, they prioritised leadership, including diversity.

Theres some other case studies here on linked in - like a CEO implementing mindfulness practices in the workplace, and that "Paying Positive Attention to Employees Can Improve The Bottom Line".

Goodluck with it - looking forward to reading!

Mel U3225022 (discuss • contribs) 12:13, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

I've also fixed your hanging indent. You mentioned this was something you needed fixing :) U3225022 (discuss • contribs) 12:22, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title is correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Excellent – Well developed 3-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. I think you could be probably drop the 3rd level of heading, to avoid being overly complicated. The 2-level heading structure has sufficient depth. The Enron case study probably doesn't warrant a separate heading, but it could be usefully incorporated into the most relevant other section Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section Add an image to the scenario or case study to help attract reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are well developed, but consider alignment between the focus questions and top-level headings 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings As you get to know the literature better, you might find general motivational theories (such as Maslow's hierarchy of needs to be less relevant), so be prepared to let go of more general material in favour of more specific material Probably theory-strong and research-weak at the moment; strive for an integrated balance (see marking criteria) Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) – even better, write in your own words Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Make sure to cite all figures (e.g., see Figure 1) - note capitalisation Consider increasing image size for diagrams with text from to make it easier to view 6= Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 6. Learning feature No comment 7. References Good Needs copyediting Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Move academic peer-reviewed sources into References and cite 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Add description about self Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter 10. Social contribution One type of contribution (direct edit) made without direct links to evidence of changes How to make other types of contributions and how to provide direct links to was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see more about how to make social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:29, 18 August 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon The focus questions are clear and relevant Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds reasonably well on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) The grammar for a small number of sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Abbreviations Check and correct formatting of abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.) APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate about concepts in your own words Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Very good use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Add more links Social contribution ~1 logged contribution with direct links to evidence ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:21, 2 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening slide conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way The title is displayed The sub-title is display very briefly The title and sub-title are not narrated The presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the presentation is established A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content; summarise The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes reasonably good use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples The presentation provides basic practical advice Conclusion Provide a conclusion slide which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with take-home messages for each focus question Audio The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences Basic intonation Audio recording quality was reasonably good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title. This would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:37, 8 November 2024 (UTC)