Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Alcohol, dopamine, motivation, and emotion

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Hi,

I find your topic really interesting and thought might give you some research to support your topic. I can't really access the study but the abstract look interesting and related to your topic. It said motivation stimulus in the dopamine is stimulated by alcohol. Which in turn increase the repetitive behavior of alcohol consumption. I hope you find it useful. :) https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/15704345 (2nd Sept 2018, 22:00 PM) Khin1994

Hi! Your topic looks likes its going to be really interesting!! Can't wait to read all of it! I just fixed up your quiz so it works :) I think I've selected the right answers to be correct, if not just go in and edit it again and put a '+' in front of the correct answer. Also just edited your figures so that they are APA formated now :) Good luck!! --MaddieCarleton (discuss • contribs) 22:07, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Very good User page OK Consider adding a link to the book chapter you are working on Social contribution Link doesn't go directly to evidence of contribution See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings Effective overall structure The "What is dopamine?" top-level headings isn't really needed - cover this concept briefly within the Overview or subsequent sections, with links to dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources for more info. This will allow the bulk of the structure to be focused on addressing the core topic (the chapter's sub-title). Key points Reasonably good development of key points Conclusion is underdeveloped - it is the most important section Image Good Consider making image sizes of these diagrams larger Use APA style References Good Use APA style Only include peer-reviewed references - other links should go in external links Resources See also - Good External links - None provided (the links that were here have now been moved to See also)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:56, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Initial suggestions 2024

@U3219927: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Drugs/Alcohol
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Neurotransmitters/Dopamine
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.
• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the previous feedback above

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:11, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3219927. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:37, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Thank you :) U3219927 (discuss • contribs) 10:40, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Messy heading structure – needs work (see Tutorial 2) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Remove manual numbering from headings (numbers will be applied automatically) 3= Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section. Add an image to the scenario to help attract reader interest. Simplify/abbreviate the brief description of the topic/problem. Make this section more user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent sections. Present the description outside of feature boxes. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) Promising focus questions Use a numbered list per Tutorial 2 Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended 3. Overview No comment 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations Remove underlining; consider replacing with sub-headings (see Tutorial 2) A lot of the key points lack sufficient citation. This makes me wonder whether the content may have been AI-generated. If so, following the using genAI guidelines, otherwise this would violate academic integrity. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Underway See earlier comments about this being potentially non-acknowledged gen-AI content What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Promising use of one ore more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links All references need to be cited in the text Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Move academic sources into references and cite in the chapter Use sentence casing 9. User page Good Brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: comments on other chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms Are these contributions based on AI-generated content? If so, please follow the using genAI guidelines, otherwise it is a violation of academic integrity

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:43, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

Suggestion for enhancement

Hey! I really like your topic choice, very interesting. I thought I'd give some guidance on potential enhancement to your chapter.

I think you should dive deeper into the neuro mechanisms involved in the dopamine system, this would be particularly interesting for individual differences. For example, is there a case study on a genetic predisposition that effects dopamine receptor's functions? > this study looks helpful for you: https://doi.org/10.1002/ajmg.b.30080

I also think providing insight into how alcohol consumption can be positive and negative because it makes it more relatable for the reader rather than seeing it as black or white.

I hope that helps you, good luck! Ashdruett (discuss • contribs) 09:40, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback U3219927 (discuss • contribs) 20:53, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

General feedback

I really liked the use of visuals in your chapter, it really helps to make the information more accessible, especially for visual learners like me! The quiz was also a great touch to engage readers and reinforce key concepts. Maybe one suggestion would be to expand a bit more on how dopamine specifically influences motivation aside from alcohol consumption, as it could add depth to your explanation. Overall, great job! [[User:Cophiesollins|Co

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement include: Addressing earlier feedback The structure is overly complicated There is insufficient evidence that primary, peer-reviewed theory and research was used in the preparation of the chapter There is insufficient focus on the role of dopamine in the main body I suspect that some of this chapter is based on unacknowledged use of genAI content; if so, it violates academic integrity principles Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) Move embedded external links to non-peer-reviewed sources into the External links section Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image (fixed) Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Reads like generic genAI output; write more compellingly in your own words The focus questions are overly detailed and push outside the scope of the chapter. This is probably setting up too challenging a task. Theory A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained A promising range of ideas are presented but it is far from clear how this material is derived from a first person reading of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., definitions). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Builds exceptionally well on other chapters and Wikipedia articles Builds effectively on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Builds reasonably well on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Builds somewhat on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Builds on one previous chapters and/or Wikipedia article Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding interwiki links for key terms) Insightful/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) If you didn't consult an original source (e.g., ?), cite it as a secondary source The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, use primary, peer-reviewed sources Excellent/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Some/Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts One good use of an example to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Excellent/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are well referenced Some/Many claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Excellent/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory Insufficient integration with chapters Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Reads like generic, fluffy genAI output; write more compellingly in your own words Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Convert bullet-points into sentences/paragraphs Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The structure is overly complicated; simplify Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Reasonably well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., "(see Figure 1)"; do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use basic APA style (7th ed.). To improve: Only cite primary, peer-reviewed sources (e.g., not news articles) The full-stop is in the wrong place in this sentence: If the reward exceeds expectations, dopamine levels rise, reinforcing the behaviour. (Arias-Carrión et al., 2010)" References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Move external links into the External links section Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use alphabetical order Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, mostly moderate contributions with direct links to evidence Was edit genAI content? If so, it should be acknowledged as such in the edit summary.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:05, 31 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview The opening slide(s) conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) A basic context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented There are probably too many focus questions Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little There is too much content (goes over time) There is too much content, in too much detail. Provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of content well than a large amount poorly. The selected content doesn't sufficiently use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research about the topic The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes no use of one or more examples The presentation provides basic practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides, with webcam The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title. This would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Provide clickable links to the image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:47, 9 November 2024 (UTC)