Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Relief

Initial suggestions

@U3216413(2023): Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Positive emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Stress
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:32, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3216413(2023). FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:25, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading structure

The Overview and Conclusion should not have any sub-headings. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:25, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is incorrectly worded Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing See earlier comment about not using sub-headings for the Overview The Conclusion should be a top-level heading Tutorial 2 covered headings The current structure heavily emphasises "What is relief?" The current structure does not sufficiently emphasise "What role relief play in our emotional lives?" Consider adopting closer alignment between the focus questions and the top-level headings Overview Not provided Key points Consider using a style which is more accessible to lay readers Remove many broken embedded external links. Use APA style citations and references instead. Promising balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A relevant figure is not presented and cited Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK Remove numbering For APA referencing style, check and correct: use hanging indent italicisation Resources See also OK Move external link to External links Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links OK Include source in brackets after link User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page, create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on Twitter! Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) Add a brief summary of each contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:07, 20 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Consider providing a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident What about cross-cultural aspects of relief? Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Replace double spaces with single spaces > Figures Figures are captioned Figures and/or their captions could be more closely aligned with relief Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text < Citations use correct APA style References are a mess; use either APA style or a consistent wiki style, not both Learning features Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/Insufficient use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Include sources in parentheses Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:25, 1 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no explicit use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by briefly describing a synthesis of the best research about this topic Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes creative use of text, images, and stock video The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Some of the font size colours could be made easier to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well/reasonably well/partially/poorly matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by briefly describing a synthesis of the best research about this topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter The presentation should provide stand-alone access to the references used A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:31, 7 November 2023 (UTC)