Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Overchoice, motivation, and emotion

Initial suggestions

@Atu320270: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Choice
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:55, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

A suggestion: consider the following article to further your knowledge on decision paralysis: 'Is Consumer Overchoice a Reason for Decision Paralysis?'

--U3227976 (discuss • contribs) 22:27, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Addition to book chapter

Hey! I have added a quiz template for you to use. I think using a quiz would be a great way to test the readers knowledge. Let me know what you think!!--Alice hatcher (discuss • contribs) 08:04, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:48, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title At the time of submission ... The wording and/or capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. The wording and/or capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Remove poor formatting (e.g., starting a heading with a hyphen) Emotion is not reflected in the headings Case study doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed case study within relevant sections There are two Conclusion sections References should not have sub-headings Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Expand brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this sectionction Key points Don't beat around the bush; get stuck into what OC is and how it is related to each of motivation and emotion Use bullet points (see Tutorial 02) Be guided by clear focus questions Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Not developed User page Good Description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:48, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The sub-title has been corrected to match the index of topics For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Good Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image I've added a feature box for the case study Explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Theory A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Reasonably good review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Needs proofreading to be of a professional standard Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Basic, 2-level heading structure Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Remove full-stops and colons from the end of headings ap Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[4] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Figures are captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). Citation formatting is poor. For example: Full-stops should occur after a citation in parentheses at the end of a sentence Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses "Lyengar and Lepper, 2000" should be "Lyengar and Lepper (2000)" If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author first name or initials References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Basic use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Include sources in parentheses Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:42, 3 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it doesn't explain the relationship between overchoice, motivation, and emotion and it is over the maximum time frame. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation describes overchoice, but does not explain the relation between motivation, emotion, and overchoice This presentation could be improved by providing visual diagrams to represent the theoretical ideas The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims Use APA style for citations The presentation provides one overly detailed example The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good Recording volume was quiet Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very basic The presentation makes very basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Use sentence casing rather than full capitalisation Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time Direct quotes need page numbers; even better, express in your own words in order to demonstrate understanding The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A very brief, poorly written description of the presentation is provided. Improve. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:27, 15 November 2023 (UTC)