Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Meditation and mindfulness

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Hello, I think this is a really interesting topic, I found this TED talk which talks about the many long-term benefits of mindfulness, and how it can manifest through an altered brain structure. It's called 'how mindfulness changes the emotional life of our brain' Sireyes (discuss • contribs) 13:24, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Sireyes

Useful external link

Hey. I'm glad someone has chosen such an important topic to talk about, as everyone should follow mindfulness! Here is a video that I found highly interesting and useful regarding using mindfulness and hopefully increases people's desire to incorporate mindfulness. How mindfulness meditation redefines pain, happiness and satisfaction U3224687 (discuss • contribs) 17:04, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Hey there, you have started off strong with your chapter, however I feel more clarification and details could make it even better and allow you to furhter develop the topic you have chosen. The information is already good, however I have left some sources below relating to the topic. Hope it helps and goodluck! https://library.canberra.edu.au/permalink/61ARL_CNB/pons8o/cdi_pubmedcentral_primary_oai_pubmedcentral_nih_gov_4941786 https://library.canberra.edu.au/permalink/61ARL_CNB/pons8o/cdi_doaj_primary_oai_doaj_org_article_a5b8cd6ec4494dce9e5e9b3b69032a2c https://library.canberra.edu.au/permalink/61ARL_CNB/pons8o/cdi_pubmedcentral_primary_oai_pubmedcentral_nih_gov_5329004 --MojoHides (discuss • contribs) 06:55, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is incorrectly spelt The sub-title is incorrectly spelt Headings Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Definitions is a pedestrian heading; integrating definitions as needed into other sections and remove this heading. Remember to link the first mention of key words to further info on Wikiversity or Wikipedia. Significantly reduce emphasis on history and culture Significantly increase emphasis on how meditation contributes to mindfulness according to psychological science Remove "Quiz" as a heading; instead integrate each quiz question within its most relevant section Overview Add a scenario in a feature box at the start to help catch reader interest. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) Focus questions lack sufficient focus; closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Why focus on "attention focused meditation"? The topic is "meditation" more broadly. It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: add spaces between initials doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources Good choice of links, but poorly formatted (see Tutorial 02) User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the correct sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context is established for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important) Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory What is meditation? A brief description would be useful. Why focused attention meditation? What is focused attention mediation? (This can be used as an example, but is not the focus of the topic) What psychological theories help to understand the relation between meditation and mindfulness? The presentation makes basic implied use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) The Conclusion could be strengthened by synthesising the best psychological theory and research about this topic The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides It would be better to use a large font size Consider using greater contrast between text colour and background colour to improve readability of text The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation The formatting of the title and sub-title is not the same as for the book chapter A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter It lacks a sharp focus on addressing the topic (the sub-title), drifting into a more general chapter about meditation on one hand, and a more specific chapter about focused attention meditation on the other hand. It could also be improved by providing a more indepth examination of research about this topic. Theory is reasonably well covered; research is not so well covered Excellent/Very good/Reasonably good/Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. This chapter "beats around the bush" for ~* words (i.e., too much preamble) before starting to directly tackle the target topic in the section titled "*" For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Engage reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon It is unclear why focused attention meditation becomes the focus. The topic is broader (How can meditation contribute to mindfulness?) Basic/Insufficient focus questions The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Perhaps consider neuroscientific theories about meditation and mindfulness. What does mindfulness look like neurologically? And how does meditation work from a neuroscience perspective to induce mindfulness? Builds somewhat on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) The definitions section is very basic; convert into sentences, but keep it brief and include more key citations Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold or italics) Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Abbreviations Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell them out APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Reasonably good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Minimal use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Use alphabetical order Reasonably good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~2 logged, useful social contributions with direct links to evidence ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:22, 18 November 2023 (UTC)