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Initial suggestions

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@U3215755: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:31, 13 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:48, 24 September 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. I've put them in the title template
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Messy heading structure – needs work
  3. Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  4. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections
  5. The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings
  6. Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.)
  7. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  1. Good; promising
  2. Remove sub-headings
  3. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios)
  4. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section
  5. Good content; but avoid getting overly detailed; consider moving some details to subsequent sections
  6. Good start on focus questions, but would benefit from refining - I've made a small edit
  7. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Not developed
  1. None
  1. Learning feature in Overview
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. OK but untidy
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. provide dois rather than website URLs
    2. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    3. correct style for volume number and issue number
    4. remove extra line breaks
    5. etc.
  1. See also
    1. Heading corrected
    2. Use internal linking style for Wikipedia links (see Tutorial 02)
    3. Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02)
  2. Destinations good
  3. Style poor (see Tutorial 02)
  1. User info has been removed from topic page
  2. Created – minimal, but sufficient
  3. Brief description about self provided – consider expanding
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. At least three different types of contributions with some direct and some indirect link(s) to evidence
  2. If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Great to see you on X (formally known as Twitter)!
  4. Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:48, 24 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter
  2. I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter because it seems to be incomplete in several places.
  3. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box
  3. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Reasonably clear focus questions
  1. A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Reduce initial emphasis on meditation (instead summarise, link to related resources); expand focus on guided meditation
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Some use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Insufficient review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful.
  4. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Insufficient integration between theory and research
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research
  1. Missing
  2. Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic
  3. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  4. Summarise key points
  5. Address the focus questions
  6. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic and incomplete
  1. Layout
    1. The chapter lacks sufficient development in the heading structure
    2. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
    2. Figures
      1. Figures are captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    3. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Do not include author first name or initials
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
      2. Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      3. Include hyperlinked dois
  1. Insufficient use of learning features
  2. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic (poorly formatted - fixed) use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  8. Basic use of case studies or examples
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
  1. ~2 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:59, 31 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it is over the maximum time limit.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the title is displayed and narrated. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A basic context for the presentation is established. Consider using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content.
  4. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory
  5. There is too much general theory about emotion regulation
  6. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  7. Some citations are included to support claims
  8. Use APA style for citations
  9. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  10. A case study was introduced towards the end. The presentation could be improved by abbreviating the case study and presenting it earlier.
  1. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit
  1. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point
  3. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
  4. Audio recording quality was very quiet. I needed volume turned up to max.
  5. Keyboard clicks are audible. Review microphone set-up. External mic gives best results.
  6. The narrated content is matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Consider using bullet points
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images
  6. Also consider using diagrams
  7. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
  8. The visual content is matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. dois are missing from the references
  4. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  5. A link from the book chapter is provided
  6. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Reply