Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Growth mindset and mental health

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@Mia Pearse: After reading through your topic development, I can say that the structure flows very well. The diagram you used for the mindset was helpful to look upon while reading the specific section. The quiz questions were clear and answers were previously provided in the paragraphs above. --U3230383 (discuss • contribs) 11:15, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@Mia Pearse: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Mental health
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Mindset
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:42, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Mia Pearse. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:57, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The title not correct formatted (capitalisation) The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Focus on the topic rather than the person (e.g., rewrite the "Carol Dweck, Ph.D. Mindset Theory" heading) What is the relationship? - a bit vague; refine to more specific heading(s) as knowledge develops. This seems to be where most of the research is reviewed. Consider embedding review of relevant research throughout. Overview Promising, basic development Consider adjusting opening scenario to represent a growth rather than a fixed mindset Don't worry about summarising theories and disorders here, but yes, explain why the problem is important and provide a very clear explanation and illustration of what a GM looks like and does Topic questions should be focus questions The first two questions are too broad - there are other chapters/pages about these topics Concentrate on what is unique about this chapter: GM x MH. Unpack this relationship. So, the second two questions are better. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Use 3rd person perspective GM theory seems to be well covered; but little mention of research Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., what is MH). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Focus on a take-home message for each focus question Conclusion (the most important section): Underway In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Only link a term when it is first used. Promising use of examples/case studies Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK Move non-peer-reviewed sources to External links For APA referencing style, check and correct: Remove "Retrieved from" capitalisation italicisation page numbers missing Resources See also Good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing User page Excellent – used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution 2 direct edits with direct link to evidence No evidence of talk page comment 1 direct link to discussion forum post

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:34, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi Mia, I read through your chapter and think it covers everything it should so far! I just have a little suggestion; for your subtitle of Components of Growth Mindset, I would love to see the dot points you have written in a table form to improve the readability for viewers.

Good luck with it all!

Marnie U3204500 (discuss • contribs) 05:40, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably solid chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and some use of research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon and establish focus questions for the chapter. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example Reasonably clear focus question(s) Theory Good coverage of relevant theory However, overly focused on general background information and definitions; summarise and move to the more substantive aspects of theory Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Very good use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information One good use of an example to illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider using more. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are several aspects which are below professional standard Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[4] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[5] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Figures Figures are captioned in a basic way; provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: There were two lists - combine and put into alphabetical order Cite all references (or remove them) Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end Good use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Social contribution ~16 logged, useful, moderate to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:33, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed and narrated. Also display the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter. This presentation starts with an engaging example to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by explaining why it is important) Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic The presentation covers growth mindset but not so much the relationship between growth mindset and mental health The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Did Alex succeed? What did he change? What effects did it have on his mental health? The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented but it is rather empty What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Audio The audio is easy to follow y The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Reasonably good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide a hyperlink to source of images (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:55, 9 November 2023 (UTC)