Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Episodic future thinking and delay discounting 2

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:49, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title Incorrect title and sub-title Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Overly complicated 3-level structure – simplify Messy heading structure – needs work Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections Put the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are promising but overly complicated. They look a bit ChatGPT-ish? Acknowledge in edit summaries if using AI, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Remove overcapitalisation (e.g., theories should not be capitalised) Simplification needed - identify the most relevant theory, research, and examples, and concentrate on those rather than trying to cover too much territory/detail Good balance of theory and research Extremely well cited - but will need to be selective Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use quiz question(s) - remove heading and embed in relevant sections Consider including more examples/case studies, table(s) etc. References Good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation doi formatting Resources Not developed User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Add description about self Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:49, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good No citations? Expand the case study; provide more concrete examples Clear, detailed focus questions Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Some of the theoretical content is overly broad (e.g., related cognitive processes). Concentrate instead on the relationship between EFT and DD There is too much content about the separate concepts of EFT and DD and not enough about their relationship Some embedded links to other chapters Build more strongly on other related chapters Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Very good integration between theory and research The earlier parts of the chapter place more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good to excellent summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Some practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter structure is overly complicated; consider how to synthesise Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Figures Figures are well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Very good use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Minimal use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, minor to moderate/major

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:16, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Consider using an example to help introduce the concept Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes effectivec use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed citation Audio recording quality was OK. However, note that probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:38, 11 November 2023 (UTC)