Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Death and meaning in life

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Topic selection[edit source]

@U3222680: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:30, 7 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Viktor Frankl[edit source]

I came across your book chapter, and straight away I thought of famous psychiatrist Viktor Frankl, He talks about the meaning of life,

Here is a link to his wiki page information: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Viktor_Frankl#:~:text=Viktor%20Emil%20Frankl%20(26%20March,the%20central%20human%20motivational%20force.

and a book on him https://books.google.com.au/books?hl=en&lr=&id=W3q8R4dRZTwC&oi=fnd&pg=PA9&dq=viktor+Frankl&ots=gpSODz5eBL&sig=KX5BsGx9mkLvgm8V9Pgk8TeBylo&redir_esc=y#v=onepage&q=viktor%20Frankl&f=false

I look forward to seeing your book chapter develop. ~~~ U3162169T (discusscontribs) 10:41, 19 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Talking about death[edit source]

I think this is such an interesting topic, and after a recent death in my family, certainly something I'm thinking about a lot. For my family, such a difficult part of the process was the dying person's inability to accept their dwindling capacity and approaching death, which seems to be a very common experience.

Why is confronting our mortality so difficult? We all know with 100% certainty that someday we will die, yet there's so little discussion or acceptance of that fact - it feels like we just stick our heads in the sand. I wonder if culturally we were more open to talking about death and the dying process, it wouldn't be such a scary thing.

Here's a short clip from a movie I watched recently - it's not at all an educational source so might not be of any use, but I think it's a really interesting way of framing life and death: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gdUqHe2Wlhc&ab_channel=StevewithUnited.

Best of luck with your chapter. --U3213084 (discusscontribs) 13:33, 23 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Social Contribution[edit source]

This is a really interesting topic to tackle, and I think you have incorporated some fantastic theories and learning features to improve readers knowledge!

Just check your different figures and make sure they all match up, I believe you have two Figure 4s.

I also had a quick look at your references, if you make sure all titles are italiscised by adding two apostrophes before and after will make sure youre sticking within the APA guidelines. I hope this helps. Keep up your amazing work. U3216125 (discusscontribs) 03:42, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure
  2. I don't think this chapter needs to address the question "What is the meaning in life?", but rather focus on how mortality salience can influence meaning
  3. Consider expanding the structure by including sub-sections for top-level headings
  4. Promising use of questions for top-level headings
  5. Consider alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings

Overview[edit source]

  1. Promising
  2. Move the case study to the start of this section to help catch reader interest. Reduce image size. Align image right so text flows around. Reduce image size. Expand caption to better match text.
  3. Note that theories should not be capitalised (APA style)
  4. How does the sunrise relate to mortality salience?
  5. Audience is global, so remove Lifeline link
  6. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios)
  7. Fine tune focus questions so they are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings
  8. Theories probably doesn't need to be separate heading; instead use best available theory, research, and examples when addressing each of the other questions

Key points[edit source]

  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations
  2. I'm not convinced that the best available psychological theory and research has been identified for the development of this chapter
  3. Include more examples
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway

Figure[edit source]

  1. A relevant figure is presented
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

Learning feature[edit source]

  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Consider including more examples, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. include volume and issue numbers
    4. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Check spelling
    3. Use sentence casing

User page[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions
  2. If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Note that talk page link to-do lists not working

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:30, 24 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed
  2. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  3. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example
  4. Reasonably clear focus question(s)
  5. Some copyedits made

Theory[edit source]

  1. A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Effective use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Some good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  7. Some key citations are well used

Research[edit source]

  1. Reasonably good review of relevant research
  2. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful.
  3. Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  4. Claims are generally well referenced

Integration[edit source]

  1. Very good integration between theory and research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Rich conclusion
  2. Perhaps overly philosophical; concentrate on the psychological perspective
  3. Excellent balance of perspectives
  4. Useful take-home message(s) and/or practical questions)

Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
    4. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. beautiful) in science-based communication
  2. Layout
    1. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    2. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min)
    3. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
  4. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are reasonably well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Tables
      1. Use APA style for captions. See example
      2. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text
    5. Citations use almost correct APA style
      1. A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.") because it is an abbreviation of et alii.
    6. References use correct APA style

Learning features[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 02
  5. Very good use of image(s)
  6. Very good use of table(s)
  7. Very good use of feature box(es)
  8. Promising use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Basic use of case studies or examples
  10. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  11. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~7 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 28 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good to very good presentation
  2. The main areas for potential improvements are coverage of research, use of examples, and specific take-home messages
  3. The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas (e.g., a brief of review of relevant research)

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and the sub-title is narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A basic context for the topic is established
  4. A broad theme is established but the focus of the presentation could be made sharper by presenting specific focus questions which lead to take-home messages

and/or an outline of topics are presented

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  4. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research
  6. Include citations to support claims
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  8. The presentation provides reasonably easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with good summary points
  2. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  5. Audio recording quality was good
  6. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  7. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) (research lacking)

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is OK, but could be larger to make it easier to read (there was a lot of white space relative to text size)
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. Full-stops aren't needed at the end of bullet points
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by images
  7. Also consider using diagrams
  8. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  9. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) (except research lacking)
  10. Check and correct spelling (e.g., Exisential -> Existential)

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Excellent use of time codes
  4. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  5. The link to the chapter can be simplified to https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2023/Death_and_meaning_in_life

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:24, 6 November 2023 (UTC)Reply