Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Burnout

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Initial suggestions[edit source]

@Grace (Tram) Chu: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:27, 8 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Dear James,
Thank you for the suggestion, I appreciate it!
Best regards,
Grace. Grace (Tram) Chu (discusscontribs) 06:52, 8 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Hi Grace,

Under the section 'what is burnout?', I noticed that you have listed a couple of emotions that are either relevant or similar to burnout. I am not sure if you wished to go in-depth about each one, or if you wanted to simply list them. I thought perhaps choosing the three that interest you, or has thorough research may be best, in case you experience going over the word count (4,000).

Kind regards, Angela

(U3227684 (discusscontribs)=U3227684) (U3227684 (discusscontribs)=U3227684 19:46, 6 October 2023 (UTC).Reply

Edits[edit source]

Hi Grace

You may have noticed that your 'Overview', 'Case study' and 'What is burnout?' sections look different. I've edited these sections for you. If the edits agree with your writing style, please let me know, and I can continue to edit as you build your chapter.

I also found WHO's definition and classification of burnout really interesting as it narrows it down to occupational contexts. Recently, I've been using burnout to describe it in the context of study as well as personal life when trying to meet competing priorities that leads to exhaustion and that sense of being weighed down. I'll certainly change how I use the language but I do wonder what labels or operational definitions psychology has developed to describe similar presentations but in a non-occupational contexts.

All the best with your chapter.

Jasna JasnaM (discusscontribs) 10:35, 9 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:07, 26 September 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by simplifying the structure". That is what the book chapter will be evaluated against.
  3. Simplify to a 2-level structure
  4. The structure is overly ambitious, trying to be too comprehensive
  5. Focus on answering this question: "What is burnout and how can it be managed and prevented?". That is what the book chapter content will be evaluated against.
  6. Case study shouldn't have a separate heading
  7. Brain section should be part of theories
  8. Reduce the overall number of theories - be selective

Overview[edit source]

  1. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  2. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  3. Reasonably good focus questions
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are developed for some sections, with relevant citations
  2. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)

Figure[edit source]

  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. Figure 1 - this isn't an animation?

Learning feature[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc.

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
    2. Not developed
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Use sentence casing

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:07, 26 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. The presentation has an opening scenario to establish a context and hook audience interest
  3. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research
  6. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
  7. The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  9. The presentation provides easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A conclusion is presented with a basic take-home message
  2. Add practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question

Audio[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
  2. Audio communication is well paced
  3. Basic intonation and articulation
  4. The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent
  6. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides
  3. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by images
  7. Also consider using diagrams
  8. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
  9. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Excellent use of time codes
  4. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

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Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and good use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The writing style could be improved.
  2. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2023%2FBurnout&diff=2581771&oldid=2575008 these copyedits]

Overview[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail
  5. Clear focus questions

Theory[edit source]

  1. A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles
  3. Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
  6. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  7. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  8. It could be useful for the reader to read a case study showing how someone managed to overcome burnout

Research[edit source]

  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags) in some places
  5. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  6. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration[edit source]

  1. Good integration between theory and research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  2. Key points are well summarised
  3. Clear take-home message(s)

Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is promising but there are several aspects which are below professional standard
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences.
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
    4. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct formatting of abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.)
      2. Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell them out
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  6. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min)
    3. Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99)
    4. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words
    5. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    6. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.). For example:
    7. References use very good APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[3]

Learning features[edit source]

  1. Very good to excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Very good use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of case studies or examples
  8. Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, social contributions (image uploads) with direct links to evidence
  2. ~5 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:01, 19 November 2023 (UTC)Reply