Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Autonomous sensory meridian response and emotion

Initial suggestions

@Zmelmoth02: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the feedback on its talk page.
• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Physiological
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:13, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:26, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Remove colon from the end of heading Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Make image smaller in case study Check alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Citation should be capitalised e.g., Figure X Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Also link to related book chapters External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:26, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good to very good chapter. It makes excellent use of psychological theory and some research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The style could be used by rewriting using correct grammar. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed/Solid/Reasonably good/Basic/Underdeveloped Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in several places (e.g., see the tags) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Good/ critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but the grammar is below professional standard Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Tables Add an APA style caption to each table Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use reasonably good APA style (7th ed.). For example: Do not include author first name or initials List multiple citations in alphabetical order Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Good use of quiz(zes); they might work better as reflection question(s) because there are no objectively correct answers Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Social contribution ~13 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:44, 19 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic, but critical use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient use of citations to support claims Use APA style for citations The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A conclusion is presented with very good narrated take-home message(s) Also add bullet-points that summarise the conclusions The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes very good/ use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided Neither the full URL or an active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:52, 21 November 2023 (UTC)