Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Religiosity and coping

Additional reference

Hi Noah,

Good work so far. It's an interesting topic you've chosen. Not sure if this will help, but I came across this reference in researching my own chapter that may be useful.

Gray, K., & Wegner, M. (2010). Blaming God for our pain: Human suffering and the divine mind. Personality and Social Psychology Review, 14(1), 7-16. https://doi.org/10.1177/1088868309350299 KingMob221 (discuss • contribs) 12:24, 28 August 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Useful introduction; along with a case study and focus questions, this would do the trick for the Overview Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest The Overview should not have sub-headings; too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter. Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Excellent emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Overall, well balanced Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Grammar Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and agenerally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions use the correct format Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Figure 3 would ideally be uploaded as a diagram rather than a photograph Tables The chapter provides several well developed tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Tables are referred to using APA style Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Publisher location is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Remove spaces between volume and issue number Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) Good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. See Tutorial 02 for how to format. Are these the best resource links about this topic? Social contribution ~9 logged, useful, mostly moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrated the title and sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

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