Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Psilocybin assisted therapy and depression

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly formatted The wording of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page, create a direct link like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on Twitter! Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) Add a brief summary of each contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Overly complicated multi-level structure – consider simplifying to 2 levels The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Reduce the general background content about depression and psilocybin assisted therapy as separate constructs Consider integrating research throughout rather than having a separate section Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem (focusing on PAT -> D) Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Promising balance of theory and research Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider decreasing image size to make it less dominant in relation to the text References OK There are no references about PAT and depression For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation provide dois for all journal articles page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) None Resources See also Excellent External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:37, 4 October 2022 (UTC)

Psilocybin-related chapters

Just noting that, as we've discussed, this psilocybin assisted therapy and depression chapter is a more specific look (focusing on depression), but related to this other chapter about psilocybin assisted therapy in general: Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Psilocybin assisted psychotherapy. Provide an embedded a link to this other chapter early on in the chapter. There may be some overlap, which is fine, but the other chapter should serve as a gateway chapter to more specific psilocybin assisted therapy chapters such as this one on depression. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:01, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

Resources

Thank you for an interesting read. I found an article about the effects of Psilocybin-Assisted Therapy on Major Depressive Disorder which may be helpful for your chapter. https://jamanetwork.com/journals/jamapsychiatry/article-abstract/2772630

Gabrielle Eagling - c 16:25, 9 October 2022

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a The sub-title has been corrected to match the index of topics Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Clear, well argued Overview Consider introducing a case study or example to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained Consider tailoring the treatment description to depression Build more strongly on other psilocybin- and depression-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Psilocybin) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are balanced Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Figures Figures are well captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Remove numbers in parentheses; replace with author and year References are not in full APA style. For example: Provide full journal titles Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Include sources in parentheses. Format bullet-points per Tutorial 02 Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with mostly direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:50, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Great content and style. Overview An opening slide with a title is displayed — ideally, use the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Overview of topics is presented; consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research Excellent description of psilocybin assisted therapy treatment method Excellent description of psilocybin neurobiology These theories are somewhat applied to depression Include citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented Limitations appropriately covered The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement Very good/Good/Basic intonation The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time Spelling: Preperation -> Preparation The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced Meta-data The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:32, 11 November 2022 (UTC)