Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Functional imagery training

Chapter and APA formatting

Hi, Your outline looks great and it looks like you know what you need to talk about. A couple of suggestions, to make you figure APA, you need to italicise the word figure and the figure number. You also need to italicise journal article names and volume numbers in your reference list. In your 'see also' section, your references should look like this: Anger (Book chapter, 2011) Keep going! U3216256 (discuss • contribs) 02:52, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:22, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded The sub-title formatting has been corrected User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure Remove "Functional Imagery Training" top-level heading (because this is what the whole chapter is about). Those sub-headings can become level 1 headings and/or arranged as sub-headings under other headings. This has been addressed since the Topic Development submission. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions could include what is FIT (addressed since TD submission) an example or case study Promising balance of theory and research Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Very good Formatting fixed External links Good Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:22, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this chapter provides sufficient explanation of FIT, but it lacks a critical perspective. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Clear focus question(s). The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title). Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Theory – Breadth Basic coverage of relevant theory. Rather than focusing on history and individual researchers, focus on explaining the key theory(ies) and related research. What does FIT intervention involve? Explain this earlier, in simple terms, and provide some concrete examples. For example, weight loss is mentioned as a key area of application, but there is no explanation about how it is applied to weight or critical analysis of the research in this area. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters). Theory – Depth Good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some key citations are used, but many claims lack sufficient citation. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Key points are reasonably well summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout The chapter uses a basic heading structure. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. Do not include author first names or initials. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct how to present author names. Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Good use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:55, 30 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation content is under the maximum time limit (approx. 2:40 mins) Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Cover image a bit confusing (easy to confuse FIT with fit) Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic Elaborated intrusion theory is very well explained What makes up FIT is very well explained FIT study results needs citation There is room to add more content (time-wise) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research Include citations The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion There are two/repeated Conclusions Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The presentation lacks the polish that comes with practice Audio recording quality was OK but sounds weird. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and an incomplete sub-title are used as the name of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 9 November 2022 (UTC)