Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Closeness communication bias

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:03, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly formatted The capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents The wording of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents User page Good Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page, create a direct link like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Consider replacing the general motivation theories with more targetted theories which are more directly related to CCB Key points Promising development of key points for each section Lack of relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered bullet points for the focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Move references into the References section. Keep citations in the main body. Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A figure is presented. Ideally, present figures which are more directly related to the topic. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources Links added, but see Tutorial 02 for how to add internal and external links

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:03, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Refine to a smaller set of focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). It is unclear how intrinsic and extrinsic motivation relates to this topic. It is unclear how Maslow's hierarchy of needs relates to this topic. It is unclear how incentive theory relates to this topic. Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are referenced Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration There is basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary Add practical, take-home message(s) for each focus question Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic As discussed in Tutorial 02, use the default font size; big tags removed Title capitalisation fixed Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use "participants" rather than "subjects" (APA style) "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Check and correct consistency of "closeness-communication" and "closeness communication" Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Do not include author initials References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Very basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 2 Very good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Excellent/ use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) and reflection questions The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. It is doubtful that these are key resources about this topic. Social contribution ~1 logged, minor social contribution with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 2 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it fails to directly address the topic (see the sub-title), wanders off into general motivation theory, and is well over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction Consider creating a more engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the topic is established Focus questions are presented. They could be improved by being less general and more focused on directly unpacking the topic. The two key questions should be, as per the sub-title, why does it occur, and how can it be overcome? Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation does not adequately addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research Skip the section on motivation (too general) and stay more directly focused on the sub-title questions The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Provide practical, easy to understand information Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is (just) sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:04, 22 November 2022 (UTC)