Latest comment: 2 years ago2 comments2 people in discussion
Hi!
As someone diagnosed with ADHD this topic automatically took my interest! One area that I think is always a good talking point is how identifying ADHD in men and women is different. Also how their symptoms differ! (Just some food for thought) Definitely, something to note when diagnosing, that women may have different symptoms than men.
Slobodin, O., & Davidovitch, M. (2019). Gender Differences in Objective and Subjective Measures of ADHD Among Clinic-Referred Children. Frontiers in Human Neuroscience, 13. https://doi.org/10.3389/fnhum.2019.00441
Chronis‐Tuscano, A. (2022). ADHD in girls and women: a call to action – reflections on Hinshaw et al. (2021). Journal of Child Psychology and Psychiatry, 63(4), 497–499. https://doi.org/10.1111/jcpp.13574
Hello! I was reading through your chapter and wow that's a lot of really awesome content you have put in. A suggestion I would make is to try and narrow down the scope of your content as it is quite broad and covers a lot of background information regarding ADHD. I think focussing more on the motivational aspect and ADHD's impact on motivation, as well as perhaps discussing how to increase motivation in someone who has ADHD would be beneficial for your chapter. Finding articles to support this would be helpful, as well as providing hyperlinks. Hope this helps! U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 01:50, 12 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hi I was looking at the presentation of your chapter you have included a lot of good information on the topic. A suggestion I would have is to maybe include some tables and some short quizzes to add to the presentation and engagement of your book chapter :)Hope this helps! U3215103 (5:33PM October 16th 2022) - Social contribution
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Hi,
It looks as if you have started gathering information, and you have an extensive symptomatology section. It would be helpful if you had sources to back up what you are saying.
This book would be a good place to look for the basics on physiological psychology and its available for 3 day loans at the UC library: Kalat, J. W. (2019). Biological psychology (13th ed.). Boston, MA, USA: Cengage
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Hey,
As someone with ADHD, I love your topic!
I'm particularly interested in what you'll find for environmental influencers of ADHD and motivation.
For me personally, cognitive remediation was a huge part of developing the skills to manage ADHD-related amotivation. As such, I though I would share a couple journal articles discussing the intervention. I hope they help.
Stevenson, C. S., Whitmont, S., Bornholt, L., Livesey, D., & Stevenson, R. J. (2002). A cognitive remediation programme for adults with Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder. The Australian and New Zealand journal of psychiatry, 36(5), 610–616. https://doi.org/10.1046/j.1440-1614.2002.01052.x
Tajik-Parvinchi, D., Wright, L., & Schachar, R. (2014). Cognitive Rehabilitation for Attention Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD): Promises and Problems. Journal of the Canadian Academy of Child and Adolescent Psychiatry = Journal de l'Academie canadienne de psychiatrie de l'enfant et de l'adolescent, 23(3), 207–217.
Veloso, A., Vicente, S. G., & Filipe, M. G. (2020). Effectiveness of Cognitive Training for School-Aged Children and Adolescents With Attention Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder: A Systematic Review. Frontiers in Psychology, 10. https://doi.org/10.3389/fpsyg.2019.02983
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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Thorough, but needs to be more targetted/concentrated towards addressing the topic: "How does ADHD impact on motivation and what can be done about it?" Background info about what ADHD is, what causes it etc. can be sumamrised, with embedded links to re# Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Otherwise, the chapter risks not providing adequate coverage of the target topic.
As per point above, the plan for this chapter currently seems to address a different question (e.g., "What is ADHD, why causes it, and how can it be treated?"). But the target topic is about the impact of ADHD on motivation and how it can be managed. There is a risk that this could be an excellent chapter about ADHD but not be sufficient as a chapter addressing the target topic.
That issue aside, the key points are well developed.
Good balance of theory and research
There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Excellent use of examples/case studies
Consider including more examples/case studies
Cite each reference at least once in the main text.
Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year)
Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
Move references into the References section. Keep citations in the main body.
Conclusion (the most important section):
Well developed
Underway
Under developed
Hasn't been developed
What might the take-home, practical messages be?
In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
Generally well-written, but I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of grammar and spelling errors.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Great choice of topic! As someone with a recent diagnosis of ADHD I'm intrigued to see how your chapter develops so I can learn more. Can't wait to read it!
I have found a few interesting articles that may be worth considering when expanding your chapter. For example, Milioni et al. (2017) discuss the impacts of "high-functioning ADHD" in terms of "masking" of executive functioning amongst individuals with higher intellectual efficiency. They suggest this may account for difficulties in obtaining a clinical diagnosis, which I can agree with considering my own lived experience. Keezer et al. (2021) also focuses on this area of research. Very interesting stuff!
References:
Keezer, Leib, S. I., Scimeca, L. M., Smith, J. T., Holbrook, L. R., Sharp, D. W., Jennette, K. J., Ovsiew, G. P., Resch, Z. J., & Soble, J. R. (2021). Masking effect of high IQ on the Rey Auditory Verbal Learning Test in an adult sample with attention deficit/hyperactivity disorder. Applied Neuropsychology. Adult, ahead-of-print(ahead-of-print), 1–9. https://doi.org/10.1080/23279095.2021.1983575
Milioni, Chaim, T. M., Cavallet, M., de Oliveira, N. M., Annes, M., dos Santos, B., Louzã, M., da Silva, M. A., Miguel, C. S., Serpa, M. H., Zanetti, M. V., Busatto, G., & Cunha, P. J. (2017). High IQ May “Mask” the Diagnosis of ADHD by Compensating for Deficits in Executive Functions in Treatment-Naïve Adults With ADHD. Journal of Attention Disorders, 21(6), 455–464. https://doi.org/10.1177/1087054714554933 U3223109 (discuss • contribs) 00:44, 11 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
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Hey there. Great job on your book chapter looks like there was a lot of time and effort that had been put into completing this. My one suggestion to make the chapter more appealing maybe the use of more images/figures/tables throughout. This may engage the reader more and be appropriate for all kinds of audience when reading your information. U3216563 (discuss • contribs) 06:23, 16 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
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Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Figures
Figures are very well captioned
Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
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An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. The sub-title is narrated. Also narrate the title. This helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good take-home message(s)
A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary
The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question)
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question
The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
Audio communication is well paced
Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
The narration is well practiced and/or performed
Audio recording quality was excellent
Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
Links to and from the book chapter are provided
A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter