Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Leadership and morale

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Hello, this will similarly look to my chapter in 2020 Leadership and Morale: How does leadership affect morale? ( Interested to see it from the military perspective. If you want, you can also contact me if you want to ask any questions. U3187226 (discusscontribs) 11:32, 17 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

Hi U3186267. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:31, 20 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Suggestion[edit source]

Hi U3186267, I've found the topic you've chosen keenly interesting since I am undertaking a similar unit for my degree called 'political leadership'. Topics such as participative leadership, leadership grid styles, and entrepreneurial leadership are fairly interesting in regards to your topic. All the best and I look forward to see what you find. --Robert.E.House (discusscontribs) 06:21, 29 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Note re this edit that APA 7th edition style uses FirstAuthor et al. from first citation onwards.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  2. The main challenge is to concentrate the bulk of the chapter on directly addressing the question: "How does leadership affect morale?". It makes sense to briefly explain the separate concepts of "leadership" and "morale" but the task is to focus on bringing these concepts together through review and integration of psychological theory and research.
  3. Possibly it could make sense to describe the desired outcome (morale) and then how to get there (via leadership).
  4. Currently, the most important section is "The relationship between leadership and morale" - look to develop and expand this section.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for most sections, with relevant citations
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  4. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  5. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research
  6. Some use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. somewhat developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Caption uses APA style
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:44, 14 September 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Thoughts and suggestions[edit source]

Hi there,

This is shaping up to be a great chapter to read. I don't have any feedback on the material, so instead here as some thoughts about writing style and flow.

1) Right now, my main thought is that there is a lot of passive language in the chapter that could be changed to active language. You currently write in the traits of bad leaders section:

"Bad leaders are defined by a number of negative personality and character traits and vices, referred to by Hogan et al. (1994) as ‘dark side’ characteristics, which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."

While there is nothing wrong with the sentence, the passive tone doesn't give the sentence 'weight'. An active sentence might read as:

"Hogan and (his/her) colleagues (1994) write that bad leaders are defined by 'dark side' characteristics, a number of negative personality and character traits and vices which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."

2) Second relates to the section on traits and behaviours of good leaders. You explain that these are categorised into task performance and interpersonal attributes, but the specifics are lost within the paragraph. Maybe consider putting them into a table so they become more distinct?

3) The "What organisational factors affect morale?" section holds a bit too much info for a single paragraph and probably should be split for ease of reading. A split could be made where the section starts reading about authoritarian workplaces. I would also think that the "What is the effect of bad leadership on morale?" section reads a bit long, but that one is mainly on me thinking the info in last sentence can be incorporated into one of the other sentences, and you could just as easily leave it as it is.

4) Just a random thought, but perhaps the following creative commons image might be of some help? Based on what you have written it might fit around the good traits and bad traits sections:

Anyway, I look forward to reading the final version!

--U3020459 (discusscontribs) 10:40, 14 October 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clear focus question(s).
  3. Minor written expression suggestions (see my copyedits).

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information.
  3. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well cited and summarised.
  2. Some key findings could be discussed in more detail (e.g., greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful).

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Critical thinking about research is sufficient.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. The Conclusion provides a well developed summary.
  2. Consider adding practical, take-home messages.

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
    2. Check and correct use of commas versus semi-colons (;) and colons (:).
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      2. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      3. Figures are very well captioned.
    3. Citations are in very good APA style (7th ed.). Minor suggestion:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
    4. References are in very good APA style. Minor suggestions:
      1. Add spaces between author initials
      2. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Greater use could be made of bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1 (e.g., where several items are listed in a sentence).
  3. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  4. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  5. Excellent use of image(s).
  6. Excellent use of table(s).
  7. Good se of feature box(es).
  8. No use of quiz(zes).
  9. Basic use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~15 logged, useful, minor to major, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 2 November 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented but not narrated.
  2. The importance of this topic is explained.
  3. Focus questions are presented.

Content[edit source]

  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. There is probably too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Consider zooming out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio, however it moves too quickly. Slow down to help the viewer to cognitively digest the information being presented.
  2. Good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  3. Audio recording quality was excellent.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large.
  4. Check and correct typos (e.g., effect vs. affect).
  5. The amount of text on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read.
  6. The visual communication is supplemented by some images.
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated on the final slide which is over the maximum time. It would probably work better to either provide this information on the slides where images are presented and/or in the description.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:14, 15 November 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]