Hi U3186267, I've found the topic you've chosen keenly interesting since I am undertaking a similar unit for my degree called 'political leadership'. Topics such as participative leadership, leadership grid styles, and entrepreneurial leadership are fairly interesting in regards to your topic. All the best and I look forward to see what you find. --Robert.E.House (discuss • contribs) 06:21, 29 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
The main challenge is to concentrate the bulk of the chapter on directly addressing the question: "How does leadership affect morale?". It makes sense to briefly explain the separate concepts of "leadership" and "morale" but the task is to focus on bringing these concepts together through review and integration of psychological theory and research.
Possibly it could make sense to describe the desired outcome (morale) and then how to get there (via leadership).
Currently, the most important section is "The relationship between leadership and morale" - look to develop and expand this section.
Key points are well developed for most sections, with relevant citations
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Overview - Consider adding:
a description of the problem
an example or case study
There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research
Some use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?
This is shaping up to be a great chapter to read. I don't have any feedback on the material, so instead here as some thoughts about writing style and flow.
1) Right now, my main thought is that there is a lot of passive language in the chapter that could be changed to active language. You currently write in the traits of bad leaders section:
"Bad leaders are defined by a number of negative personality and character traits and vices, referred to by Hogan et al. (1994) as ‘dark side’ characteristics, which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."
While there is nothing wrong with the sentence, the passive tone doesn't give the sentence 'weight'. An active sentence might read as:
"Hogan and (his/her) colleagues (1994) write that bad leaders are defined by 'dark side' characteristics, a number of negative personality and character traits and vices which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."
2) Second relates to the section on traits and behaviours of good leaders. You explain that these are categorised into task performance and interpersonal attributes, but the specifics are lost within the paragraph. Maybe consider putting them into a table so they become more distinct?
3) The "What organisational factors affect morale?" section holds a bit too much info for a single paragraph and probably should be split for ease of reading. A split could be made where the section starts reading about authoritarian workplaces. I would also think that the "What is the effect of bad leadership on morale?" section reads a bit long, but that one is mainly on me thinking the info in last sentence can be incorporated into one of the other sentences, and you could just as easily leave it as it is.
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Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Image sources and their copyright status are communicated on the final slide which is over the maximum time. It would probably work better to either provide this information on the slides where images are presented and/or in the description.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.