Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Emotional intelligence and the dark triad

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:02, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. Title casing fixed
  2. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Description about self not provided
  2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Link not provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Insufficient summary of contribution
  2. Indirect link(s) to evidence
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  2. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure

Key points[edit source]

  1. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the phenomenon
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  3. Basic development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations
  4. Aim for a balance of theory and research
  5. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies
  7. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption uses APA style
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. punctuation
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
    4. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use internal link style (as taught in Tutorial 1)
  2. External links
    1. Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:02, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem.
  3. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  4. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter.
  5. Title adjusted to match the main book table of contents.
  6. This chapter makes insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations. Non-peer reviewed sources are over-used. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section.
  7. This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count.
  8. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
  9. There is other feedback about the topic development that has been ignored, so it is not repeated in these book chapter comments.
  10. For additional feedback, see the following comments and [ these copyedits].

Overview[edit source]

  1. Overview focused on personality, with only brief mention of EI.
  2. Clear focus question(s).
  3. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Very good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Well summarised key points.
  2. Research-focused.
  3. Add practical, take-home messages.

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is OK.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words.
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
      2. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      3. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      4. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
      5. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
      6. Figures are very well captioned.
      7. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
    5. References use very good APA style.
      1. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1.
  3. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  4. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  5. Basic use of image(s). Refer to each image in main text.
  6. No use of table(s).
  7. Basic use of feature box(es).
  8. Good use of quiz(zes).
  9. Good use of research case studies or examples. People-based case studies could be useful too.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~1 lgged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:37, 7 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. The presentation is under the maximum time limit.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Display and narrate the correct title and sub-title on opening slide to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  3. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic in a basic way.
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  8. Include key citations.
  9. Does "manipulating emotions" refer to own emotions - or the emotions of others? Explain.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was very good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., quiet, tinny, white noise, keyboard/mouse clicks audible).

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes basic use of animated slides with text and images.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is reasonably well produced.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:05, 20 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]