Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Cocaine and emotion regulation

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Hi, This is looking really good and is very infomative. Below are a few comments which may help in your final edit:

  • Don't forget that you need to put an in-text reference after each factual statement you make that isn't common knowledge - not just at the end of the paragraph. E.g "Cocaine has been around as early as the 1400s, harvested from the leaves of a plant called Erythroxylum coca. It has been utilised in many ways over time such as being used as a substance to increase physical stamina in Spanish mine workers in 1492." Both of these sentences should have references to let the reader know where you found this infomation.
  • In your Figure caption, only Figure 1 should be italisised. The rest of the information should not be.
  • Tables should also have a heading and caption, and be referenced in the main text. For example, your table relating to dopamine processes should be headed:

Table 1. Normal vs cocaine effected dopamine processes And table 1 should be referred to in your text.

  • Your 'did you know' box under neurological effects doesn't have any references

Overall great chapter! U3025324 (discusscontribs) 06:08, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[]

Perhaps consider the physiological connection between the effects of cocaine and emotion. E.g. is there an effect on neurotransmitters etc. --BMPENFOLD (discusscontribs) 03:12, 1 September 2019 (UTC) Great start on cocaine and emotion! given myself some ideas on how to approach my own work. --U3096876 (discusscontribs) 07:44, 4 September 2019 (UTC) Maybe under effects of cocaine on emotion, have a look at emotional prosody. Hulka et al., (2013) explain how cocaine effects emotional prosody. --U3158296 (discusscontribs) 09:27, 13 October 2019 (UTC)[]

I think that you're off to a really good start with your development plan, just make sure that you're adding in-text references where necessary, as it can always be easier to do it while you go, rather than leaving it until the end and finishing it later. Consider elaborating on the history of cocaine use, as it will provide insight into the prevalence of use over time, e.g., how it has evolved as an anaesthetic, to how it has evolved to abuse and the influence of the drug itself on emotion. Here is an article for reference: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1297313/. Hope this helps, good luck! --Emilymking (discusscontribs) 22:54, 15 October 2019 (UTC)[]

I like the topic you have chosen and I think you are in a good position to continue developing your topic with the appropriate choice of headings and subheadings. I have a couple of references that I hope you find interesting and may be able to help you to continue to build onto your topic. https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0896627300803748 (acute effects of cocaine on human brain activity and emotion). And this next one: https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Kim_Kuypers/publication/281518400_P1e007_Emotion_recognition_during_cocaine_intoxication/links/566572a508ae4931cd6218b7/P1e007-Emotion-recognition-during-cocaine-intoxication.pdf (emotion recognition during cocaine intoxication). I hope these are useful for you, good luck! --MPollard10 (discusscontribs) 9:49, 16 October 2019 (UTC)

This is a great topic to write about! You could have a look at Preller H. et al., and the effects that cocaine has on feeling empathy. --U3158296 (discusscontribs) 01:07, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[]

Hey! Great start to your chapter so far, but I just wanted to point out that your references aren't properly formatted for APA 7th edition - the name of the journal the article was published in (not inclusive of the comma) and the volume number should be italicised. The American Psychological Association has a great quick reference guide, which might be worth checking out!--U3190229 (discusscontribs) 06:47, 28 August 2020 (UTC)[]

Greetings! I just wanted to add some comments that may benefit the development of this chapter. Expanding on the overview (instead of just focus questions) may improve the general flow of this chapter ! From this, a more in-depth analysis with multiple sources may solidify your findings ! --U3190016 (discusscontribs) 11:11, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[]


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Incorrect; now fixed to be consistent with the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter (changed to internal link)

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with direct links to evidence (edited to make formatting easier to read).

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Under-developed 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development.
  2. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  3. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Insufficient citation of peer-reviewed sources
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption not presented.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Doesn't use APA style.

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. OK
  2. External links
    1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 19:22, 28 September 2019 (UTC) and[]

cocaine and the prefrontal cortex[edit source]

I have linked an article about how cocaine affects the prefrontal cortex and how this relates to cocaine seeking behaviour. http://web.b.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=2&sid=19644e7e-da58-4c27-93d1-2f01b4820c89%40pdc-v-sessmgr01 --Jackson McNee (discusscontribs) 05:11, 30 September 2020 (UTC)[]

Contribution[edit source]

Hi I've read through your chapter and i think its a really interesting topic, ive noticed that you have mentioned the effects cocaine has on the brain through the increase of neurotransmitters etc however, i believe it is important to mention the psychcological and physical changes in thoughts and feelings which will help people understand why individuals are so drawn to using cocaine and what they feel while using it. There is a helpful website i have linked which breaks down the effects of cocaine on individuals such as intense pleasure, feeling confident, anxious, angry or paranoid, feeling sick, body temperature rising etc. The website also has a very helpful visual of these effects and it may be something you can use (if it is free to use) or recreate in a table (if not free to use). I hope this helps with the development of your chapter :) --U3160677 (discusscontribs) 04:21, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[]


== Emotional empathy and engagement

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Hi, I found this article which looks at how cocaine can influences an individuals emotional empathy and emotional engagement. Furthermore, it goes onto explain how emotional empathy will differ depending on the age of onset. You may find this article interesting to add into your book chapter- https://reader.elsevier.com/reader/sd/pii/S0924977X15002655?token=A65A58B4DACE7587CDD0317176B4F7F33EDCF93199E1EF2DAD5068A4BDE3E0CB848D7C61F474CD4B833E3A4E008F2694 --U3190210 (discusscontribs) 02:06, 27 August 2020 (UTC) ==[]

Hi, your chapter about the influence of cocaine on emotion is very interesting! I suggest checking out the following article https://hawaiianrecovery.com/rehab-blog/how-cocaine-affects-your-brain-body-and-emotions that goes into depth about how cocaine affects the brain, body and emotions as well as how to cope with addictions. U3166897 (discusscontribs)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Link to book chapter fixed
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development.
  2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Good development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an image.
    2. an example or case study.
  3. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about cocaine (esp. history etc.) and emotion regulation as stand-alone topics). Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. The most important of the proposed sections in terms of addressing the topic of the chapter is "What is the role of cocaine in emotion regulation?".
  4. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words.
  5. Use APA style for citations (e.g., use ampersand (&) when citing a source with multiple authors in brackets).
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption
    1. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  4. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view.

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Excellent
  3. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Link casing adjusted to fit book style

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:27, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem.
  2. The main area for improvement is more use of academic peer-reviewed sources and less use of non-peer-reviewed sources.
  3. Many statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags) Frowny.svg.
  4. A second area for potential improvement is to provide a more indepth review of relevant research.
  5. In the Overview, consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
  6. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Good use of image(s).
    4. Basic use of table(s).
    5. Very good use of feature box(es).
    6. Good use of quiz(zes).
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3].
    3. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. A table is a table; a photo or diagram is a figure.
      2. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~7 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:33, 19 November 2020 (UTC)[]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. A mostly appropriate amount of content is presented - but as it runs slightly over time, consider presenting less info about the general effects of cocaine.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes some basic use of research - including some key citations would be helpful to support key claims.
  6. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies.
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  8. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. The inset video enhances viewer interest/engagement.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The video is well produced.
  2. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio recording quality was very good.
  5. Visual display quality was very good. The video inset overlapped the text on one slide.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:24, 20 November 2020 (UTC)[]

Social Contribuiton[edit source]

Hi there, I really enjoyed reading your book chapter and I feel as if I have gained lots of new knowledge surrounding this topic. I feel as if your chapter requires more evident based sources, for example peer reviewed articles, I feel this would help improve it. Below is some peer reviewed articles titles that you could search for and further use: 'Impaired emotional empathy and related social network deficits in cocaine users' -Wiley Online Library 'Re‐appraisal of negative emotions in cocaine dependence: dysfunctional corticolimbic activation and connectivity' -Wiley Online Library

--U3187388 (discusscontribs) 09:52, 6 December 2020 (UTC)[]