The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
Some relevant research is cited, but a comprehensive, critical synthesis of COR research literature is lacking.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is mediocre and not up to professional standard.
Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
There is some repetition (e.g., of the corollaries, focus questions).
The chapter would benefit from developing a consolidated list of focus questions in the Overview (I've made some changes towards this goal).
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Layout
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of images.
Good use of tables.
Very good use of feature boxes.
Very good use of quizzes.
Basic use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
Spelling
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., the first letter of author names should be capitalised).
The chapter seems to be incomplete in places (e.g., "*Discuss stress management").
APA style
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Figures and tables
Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., Figure 2 not figure 2).
Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
References are not in full APA style. For example:
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Most of the slides use an excellent combination of text and images.
Some of the latter slides are overly text-heavy.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
