Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Compliments, emotion, and motivation

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Very good Social contribution No link to evidence provided See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings Mimimal development Avoid having one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections Aim for 3 to 5 top-level sections between Overview and Conclusion. Then for the main sections, consider using 2 to 5 next-level headings to further structure the key content There is no need for a section dedicated to "Emotion and Motivation" - instead briefly summarise these concepts within the Overview and/or other sections, with links to further info in Wikipedia/Wikiversity sources. Then focus the bulk of the chapter on addressing the assigned topic: "What is the effect of giving and receiving compliments on emotion and motivation?" Key points Overview - excellent. For the focus questions, only the last one really matters. Perhaps consider dropping the first three and developing more questions related to the 4th question. Include more citations to peer reviewed psychological science resources. Conclusion - good to see some critical analysis about compliments - perhaps also make these points earlier. Image Well done on embedding images. Use the captions to advance the central narrative - explain how the image connects to key points being made in the text. References Basic Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources OK Links to Wikipedia/Wikiversity etc. sources should go in "See also"

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:48, 30 September 2018 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi there, this is an interesting chapter well done! I have found a few points where you can improve:

• Firstly, I added capital letters to the starts of your bullet points for you
• Your figure captions could be improved by relating it to the topic instead of just stating what is in the image
• You only need to hyperlink important words the first time they are used, repeat hyperlinks for motivation, emotion, operant conditioning and self-efficacy etc only need to be hyperlinked once
• In your focus questions box you don't need to include 'define motivation'
• Some more images in the second half of the chapter would really enhance the look of the page!
• Finally, you don't need the number in the brackets in your reference list such as 24(1) the 1 can be removed

I hope some of these tips help you! Great work so far --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 00:06, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter feedback

I really enjoyed reading your chapter. The theoretical components were very well done and easy to read. I also thought the layout, specifically the case study and quiz were well thought through. I have made some grammatical edits to the full paragraphs of your chapter, you'll be able to find the specific changes in the edit history of this page. I agree with the other feedback provided around needing a couple more references in the first few paragraphs of the overview and maybe thinking about restructuring the first couple of paragraphs. Smaller sentences that cover a single idea will make the overview much easier to read. Overall though, nicely done page! --U3114099 (discuss • contribs) 19:45, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi there, this is an interesting chapter well done! I have found a few points where you can improve:

• Firstly, I added capital letters to the starts of your bullet points for you
• Your figure captions could be improved by relating it to the topic instead of just stating what is in the image
• You only need to hyperlink important words the first time they are used, repeat hyperlinks for motivation, emotion, operant conditioning and self-efficacy etc only need to be hyperlinked once
• In your focus questions box you don't need to include 'define motivation'
• Some more images in the second half of the chapter would really enhance the look of the page!
• Finally, you don't need the number in the brackets in your reference list such as 24(1) the 1 can be removed

I hope some of these tips help you! Great work so far --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 00:06, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Hi, great book chapter. Following on from GabiK's feedback regarding the need for a reference to make sentence statements factual, I came across a very similar dissertation regarding compliments and positive psychology. I thought this reading may give you some helpful background reading, but also they have some great sources that you could look at yourself and reference them in your work. The link for the dissertation is https://search.proquest.com/openview/fb2c13d6f1540e72ca711a0b416b9dad/1?pq-origsite=gscholar&cbl=18750&diss=y Good work. Cheers, Lucy --Lucy Hanrahan (discuss • contribs) 22:31, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I enjoyed reading your book chapter. I also, edited and reworded the first two paragraphs of your overview. I also added suggestions for where you may need reference to make the sentence factual. I hope you like the changes. If not please feel free to go back to the before the edit on this link: https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2018%2FCompliments%2C_emotion%2C_and_motivation&type=revision&diff=1933140&oldid=1933030 --GabiK (discuss • contribs) 07:47, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Great progress with your topic. I corrected some minor grammar and spelling errors. I really liked the images you have included and thought they were very relevant and useful. I also liked the quiz you included. Great work!--Bridie Mcinerney (discuss • contribs) 00:48, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Good topic choice! I think this will be a great topic choice as it can relate to every single one of us. Amount of information provide is good, however it doesnt look so much like a standard wiki page with everything surrounded in red boxes, maybe try remove these. Good luck!--U3158773 (discuss • contribs) 01:56, 31 August 2018 (UTC)

Very interesting topic choice. I made some changes to the reference list by italicizing the journal title and adding doi's, to ensure compliance to APA conventions. Here is a guide to APA referencing you may find helpful.--Bridie Mcinerney (discuss • contribs) 07:12, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

I loved your page - super visually simple but also really informative! User:Rubykentwell 11:48, 14 October 2018 (UTC)

This page looks awesome! In your model figures (4 and 5), make sure you reference the author and year in it, as it is APA guidelines --U3158984 (discuss • contribs) 09:18, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Everyone! Thanks for your help and highly valuable feedback. I made some edits accordingly :) TarunSharma23 (discuss • contribs) 03:31, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression is excellent. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. Good use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Good use of case studies or examples. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading is excellent. APA style Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Citations When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). References are not in full APA style e.g., Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The full chapter title and sub-title are used - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Images sources and their copyright is well acknowledged. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:12, 18 November 2018 (UTC)