Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Cognitive dissonance and emotion
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Your topic sounds really interesting! The page is laid out well and the images used are good. Just a suggestion, your "picture this" scenario would stand out and attract the reader more if it were put in a feature box. I really enjoyed the crash course video you chose for an external link, however, more external links would help the reader understand your topic more in depth. Well done and can't wait to see the finished product. --Abbsu3163507 (discuss • contribs)12:28, 12 October 2018
This page is coming along great. I think it's very interesting that you have outlined the 4 different types of cognitive dissonance. I didn't know there was different types. I would warn that some of your sources are a bit old. Remember that part of the marking critieria is on the most recent and top research. I find the neural mechanisms of cognitive dissonance very interesting, but maybe consider adding a sentence at the end linking it back to your topic question. Keep your main question in mind as you write to ensure you don't go off track. Overall, great work! TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 14 October 2018 (UTC)
Looks like your chapter is going well! I thought your case study was a good one - easy for people to relate to which made it super effective. A couple of suggestions - linking to more pages would give the reader the opportunity to dig deeper if they wanted to. I saw you had done this for 'affect,' but thought you could also just link the headline if you wanted to and save yourself a few words if you're getting close. This may be somewhat out of your topic, but if you want another theory for cognitive dissonance, look up transformative learning theory by Mezirow - it's the same kind of concept, but just a slightly different perspective. Good luck with it all! Cheers, Dot--Foley.d (discuss • contribs) 00:37, 16 October 2018 (UTC)
Feedback by Nicole
Hi Joannah Thanks for responding to my canvas post. I’m happy to have helped. Unfortunately I think someone was editing your page as I was, and so the things I changed did not work. However, I did make a list of what I did change, so maybe you can change them?
I recommend that you change your case study slightly and add that Jill’s father was a life-long smoker and that doctors attribute his death to his smoking (just to reiterate the fact that she would experience cognitive dissonance if she would continue to smoke). Would you also consider changing the layout of your overview so that your main points may look a bit neater, and that when people first look at it, they can clearly see what you will cover in your chapter? I remember James saying that people read things on a web-page better if it’s not just a big paragraph (or something like that)
Added in-text citation for your Festinger reference.
Also, changed the heading a bit in “What is cognitive dissonance” so that you don’t have to cite the Festinger reference so much. Changed your Harmon-Jones (2000) in-text citation to be more in line with APA formatting- I noticed that you referenced the same article several times in the same paragraph, even though you hadn’t changed the topic to another reference.
In your connectionist model section, I noticed that your Schultz and Lepper (year?) reference had no corresponding reference in the reference list? Also, as per APA in-text citations rules, either put your references at the beginning of a point like this: Van Overwalle & Jordens (2002) or at the end, all in brackets like this: (Van Overwalle & Jordens, 2002)… I haven’t touched that part of your paragraph, but do consider if what you have written is correct? Unsure of whether you’ve put it as you have because you are discussing two Van Overwalle references… I also noticed that you did the same in your “Shame” and “Regret” sections, also referencing to the same article on multiple occasions in the same paragraph, which is unnecessary- I recommend that you amend this.
There was one typo I changed studIES to studies.
As for your reference list, you had the Festinger reference right at the top of the list, so I put it where it needs to go. While going through the rest of your references, I noticed that you had not put the Journal articles in italics, so I added all of them in for you on your references. There were also a couple of references which did not have brackets around the date, so I’ve put them in for you. Some of your journal article titles were capitalised, so I’ve changed them to lowercase as per the APA rules. Some of your doi references were also incorrect as there was a space between the doi: and the actual identifier number which meant that they did not hyperlink correctly- fixed those up for you. There was also one other reference out of order, which I corrected (sorry, can’t remember which one!)
-I also noticed that the reference of Kitayama, S., Chua, H. F., Tompson, S., & Han, S. (2013) is missing the volume, issue, and page numbers, so I’ve written in Caps where it is so it’s easy for you to find. -Also, with your McGrath, A. (2017) reference, are you certain that the page numbers are correct? -with your Van Veen, V. (2009, 11 1) reference, are you certain that the 11 and 1 are supposed to be in brackets?
Overall, I think what you have written accurately describes cognitive dissonance and emotion. You have linked to various research articles, both in the theoretical sphere as well as in terms of physiological evidence for dissonance. Your paragraphs are, as a whole, well-structured, with few grammatical mistakes, and allow for the reader to have a comprehensive, yet concise overview on the topic. I love how you’ve used a case study, as it really allows the reader to put themselves in a specific mindset of a person who is experiencing dissonance, and you’ve linked back to the case study towards the end of your chapter, which is great. I also enjoyed how you put forward the idea of cognitive dissonance in terms of consumer-choices, and the articles used seem to really match this idea. Also an interesting point on impulse buying. I liked your Future research suggestions as well- these are well-thought out.--NicoleDawnK (discuss • contribs) 10:07, 21 October 2018 (UTC)
@Joog 17: email query: listed 2 theories of cognitive dissonance and one theory of emotion however when i am writing my section on the interaction between cognitive dissonance and emotion i am struggling to apply the theories to the actual interaction between dissonance and emotion. I am wondering if we need to connect the theories to the interaction or if its okay to just have one section on the theories and then one on the intersection without mentioning theories.
- The key is to address the question, "What are the emotional effects of cognitive dissonance?" throughout the entire chapter, using both theory and research. So, a strong chapter would present theory about the connection between CD and emotion. Regarding the current "Theories of cognitive dissonance and emotion" section:
- The circumplex model of affect - as it stands, this section discusses affect, but does not make any mention of CD. Consider increasing the image size so that it is easier to read.
- Novel connectionist model - discusses both CD and affect, however description is very abstract - can you either simplify the description or provide a practical example or two that would make sense to a lay audience?
- Neural mechanisms of cognitive dissonance - mostly focuses on CD, with brief mention of emotion. Consider provide some examples? Consider including in-text wiki links to more information (e.g., about the brain structures).
- Hope this helps. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:26, 16 October 2018 (UTC)
I suggest linking to and collaborating with the chapter on Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Self-concordance theory and motivation. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:28, 16 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi, loving the chapter it's such an interesting topic! I added italicisation and removed some capital letters from your reference list so it more closely complies with APA, and I also added captions to your figures, as they all should have the Figure Number captions. Great job! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 08:22, 21 October 2018 (UTC)
|FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:|
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