Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Underdog versus favourite motivation

Initial suggestions

@Sarah Pendlebury: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Competition
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Sport
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:57, 11 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:05, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings I suspect that these headings may have been genAI-generated but not acknowledged. Please consult and follow the using genAI guidelines. See earlier comment about Heading casing I like this 2-level heading structure. It is pragmatic, clear, and interesting. However, make sure that it is used to synthesise the best psychological theory and research about this topic. Adjust the 2nd-level heading up (currently uses level 5 style) Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations I seem to recall some interesting research about play between dominant and submissive rats. The dominant rat doesn't try too hard so that there is more fun. Use APA style 7th ed. for citations (e.g., et al. for 3 more authors) Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Excellent Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Move academic sources into references and cite in the chapter 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:05, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. I suspect that some of this chapter is based on unacknowledged use of genAI output; if so, it violates academic integrity principles Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via an excellent case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon The focus questions are clear and relevant Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds on one previous chapters and/or Wikipedia article Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding interwiki links for key terms) Insightful/Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Excellent use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Bullet points are overused. Develop more of the bullet point statements into full sentences and paragraphs. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation – more info APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., "(see Figure 1)"; do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation). Tables Add an APA style caption to each table Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use excellent APA style: Learning features Excellent use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of figure(s) Very good use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, moderate to major contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:10, 2 November 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview The opening clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established through an example Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes no use of one or more examples The presentation provides good practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read Consider increasing line spacing to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time There are a lot of unnecessary full-stops Check and correct spelling (e.g., reglatory -> regulatory) The visual communication is supplemented in basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:45, 9 November 2024 (UTC)