Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Social dominance and motivation

Suggestions

Hello, excellent work so far. Your chapter is well organized, starting with a clear and engaging introduction and smoothly transitioning into the scientific discussion on social dominance theory and motivation. The case study on colonisation is very informative and helps provide a deep understanding of embedding dominance into daily social interactions and societal expectations, maintaining power imbalances and systemic inequalities. It serves as a practical example that helps ground the theoretical concepts, making the material more engaging and accessible for readers. To further enrich the chapter, consider incorporating more recent studies and references, particularly those that focus on practical applications of social dominance theory in real-world settings. This would add depth and insightfulness, especially for readers looking to apply these theories in a professional context. Additionally, be sure to move any non-peer-reviewed sources, such as commercial sites, without expert authorship. Keep up the great work! --Princess Brutus (discuss • contribs) 07:51, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Cophiesollins. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:34, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed) 2. Headings Promising 3-level heading structure Consider simplifying to a 2-level structure Adjust to better fit with the revised topic Remove bold Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section Add an image to the scenario or case study to help attract reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are somewhat aligned with sub-title and top-level headings The first two questions are promising The second two questions should be removed/revised Use bullet points 4. Key points Basic development of key points for most sections, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings# Use APA style for citations (e.g., alphabetical order for multiple citations) Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Use Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References Very good Well done on identifying at least one possibly relevant systematic review and/or meta-analysis For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) 8. Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed 9. User page Good Chapter content moved into its own page Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to someone else's book chapter was provided (fixed) Move topic development content to dedicated page (fixed) 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence. This was explained in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:34, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good to very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and basic use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations could be improved in some places (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2024%2FSocial_dominance_and_motivation&diff=2673558&oldid=2669731[ these copyedits] Overview Reasonably good Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image What social dominance behaviours did Wendy engage in? Why was Wendy behaving this way? What were the consequences of Wendy's behaviour? Consider following up Wendy's scenario in other sections of the chapter Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon Reasonably clear focus questions Use bullet points for the focus questions Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The theory could be improved by condensing/being more selective and focusing on psychological rather than sociological aspects, although the sociopolitical context is relevant Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies), although, as noted above and in the research section, the chapter could condense this aspect to fit better within the maximum word count and allow more room for critical review of relevant research Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are reasonably well used But greater use use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) is recommended Reasonably good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Excellent Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good to excellent Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold) Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently aftwarwards Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Some image uploads were removed because of a lack of sufficient/appropriate copyright information The figure numbering needs correcting Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) Approximately half the references were considered for marking purposes (over word count) References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Beyond maximum word count use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:31, 18 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a reasonably good way The opening slide is difficult to read The presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example or explain importance) Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes no use of examples The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice Conclusion Provide a conclusion slide which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with take-home messages for each focus question Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Abbreviate the content, slow down, and leave longer pauses between sentences. This will help viewers to cognitively process the spoken information as it is being presented, before moving on to the next point. Basic intonation The narration could benefit from further scripting and/or practice Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides, with webcam Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well/ matched to the target topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title. This would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A clickable link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:31, 9 November 2024 (UTC)