Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Sleep and ego depletion

My Recommendation

Hey, love it so far. I would recommend an image or a quiz for it to be interactive! I look forward to learning more about your chapter :) Emdawson02 (discuss • contribs) 09:13, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Comment

Hey! Love the page so far with a clear indication of direction. I love that you've included shift workers and people who have weird schedules. Can't wait to see how this develops. I wonder if there is any research about any positive aspects? I understand your topic is about ego depletion, but I wonder if any positive aspects could be used for comparison towards the negative ones?--Josephpat03 (discuss • contribs) 04:46, 16 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3229957. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:34, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted User name removed – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Check grammar (e.g., missing question mark) Excellent alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and heading structure 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section. Add an image to the scenario to help attract reader interest. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Promising balance of theory and research Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) – more info Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed 5. Figure Excellent - One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented, captioned, and cited The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Use APA style or wiki referencing style, but not both. Currently, a mixture of referencing styles is used. 8. Resources See also One of two link types provided Also link to related book chapters Use sentence casing External links Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link 9. User page Good Brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:34, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

social contribution

hey, you have done a great job so far, i really like the use of relatable examples, it makes the chapter more engaging. you could explore long-term consequences of chronic sleep deprivation and ego depletion across various fields like the workplace and in academics. you have effectively integrated ego depletion theory with sleep research it adds strength and strong connection between self-control, willpower, and sleep quality.

Great work so far :) U3236683 (discuss • contribs) 07:18, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is to reduce general material about sleep and to focus on its relationship to ego depletion using the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) Move embedded external links to non-peer-reviewed sources into the External links section For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a somewhat relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon in a basic way Overly focused on sleep as a broad phenomenon; to improve, focus more strongly on the relationship between sleep and ego depletion. Ego depletion is barely mentioned. Basic focus questions The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., general informatio about sleep). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Builds somewhat on previous, chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters and Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Insufficient integration with related chapters Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics, bold, and/or change in font size) Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of affect vs. effect APA style Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99) Figures Well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use basic APA style (7th ed.). To improve: Do not include author first name or initials Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use basic APA style: Not all of the References have been cited (e.g., Vermeir et al., 2021) Provide the full journal title Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Learning features Basic use of learning features Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Reasonably good use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Move external links into the External links section (fixed) Basic (1) use of external links in the "External links" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, mostly minor to moderate contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation is arguably overly focused on the benefits of sleep more generally rather than specifically on the relationship between sleep and ego depletion The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples The presentation provides practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by video and/or images The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:58, 5 November 2024 (UTC)