Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Role-playing games, motivation, and emotion

Initial suggestions

@AndreaChau: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Games
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:06, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi AndreaChau. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:37, 5 October 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted Note that I've made very minor changes to the sub-title meaning (same purpose/meaning) 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure 3. Overview Add a scenario or case study in a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. The definitional material about types of RPGs could be efficiently summarised in a table Good balance of theory and research Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression such as checking grammatical and spelling errors Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Placeholder use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages 7. References Very good Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: comments on chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

Figure 2 discrepancy

Hello,

The image you used for figure 2 to represent an online RPG is actually from a 1997 single-player RPG, final fantasy 7. The final fantasy game you're looking for is final fantasy 14 :3 it's very confusing considering ff15 is back to a single-player game, just wanted to let you know if you wanted more accuracy :3 U3249300 (discuss • contribs) 13:53, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon reasonably well Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses about effects/impacts? Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are well referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Basic use of captions Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use very good/ APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Learning features Very good use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of case studies or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Social contribution ~14 logged, useful, mostly moderate to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:40, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good to excellent presentation Overview The opening slide(s) convey the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established through an example Focus questions are used to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims Use APA style for citations The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples The presentation provides practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides useful take-home message(s) Audio The audio is fun and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes excellent use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well/reasonably well/poorly matched to the target topic The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers Excellent use of time codes An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources are communicated (links are not active). Licenses are unclear. A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:11, 8 November 2024 (UTC)