Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Pregnancy loss and emotion

Heading casing

Hi Annabelle Taylor. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 9 August 2024 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@Annabelle Taylor: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Death
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Grief
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Pregnancy
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Relationships
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 9 August 2024 (UTC)

Feedback

Your topic development is looking really good! Your topic is something I find quite interesting so I cannot wait to read the final chapter. U3200844 (discuss • contribs) 13:23, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use default heading style (e.g., remove bold and trailing colons) Concentrate on the relationship between PL and emotion rather than each of these as separate concepts 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add an image to the scenario or case study to help attract reader interest Simplify/abbreviate the overview. Make this section more user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent sections. Basic definitions probably don't need to be focus questions; concentrate on unpacking the core topic Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with illustrative examples Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of grammatical errors Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Figure 2 isn't a foetus (as indicated in citation?) Captions could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References OK but incomplete and not in APA style Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) 8. Resources See also OK Use sentence casing Move external links to the external links section Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Not developed 9. User page Very good Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Rename the book chapter link to make it more user-friendly (see Tutorial 02) 10. Social contribution Use a numbered list (as taught in Tutorial 2) Two out of three types of contributions made with with indirect link(s) to evidence The other types of contribution are making: posts about the unit or project on other platforms If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:33, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, but insufficient chapter mainly due to the lack of sufficient citation and integration of reserach evidence Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Two questions were very similar, so I've combined them Use open-ended rather than closed-ended focus questions (fixed) Develop closer alignment between the the focus questions and headings Theory A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., about emotion). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Why was Kübler-Ross' stage theory of grief focused on? What is the evidence about this theory compared to other theories of grief and loss as applied to pregnancy? Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good The target audience is international, not domestic. Only 0.3% of the world human population lives in Australia. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter has an overly complicated structure; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion Remove colons from the ends of headings Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] APA style Use serial commas[3]. Video (1 min) "Use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99) Figures Figures are briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example The figure numbering needs correcting Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Figure 4 would have been better presented as a wiki table so that it could be edited and improved Citations use basic APA style (7th ed.). To improve: Do not include author first name or initials References use basic APA style: The reference list does not indicate that the best psychology theory and research about this topic was used to prepare this chapter Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Basic use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Reasonably good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Reasonably good use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Move external links to the external links section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Target an international audience Social contribution ~10 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:41, 19 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it is over the time limit and doesn't sufficiently hone in on synthesising the best psychological theory and research about this topic The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is very briefly displayed and narrated Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario) A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example A context for the presentation is established A basic context for the presentation is established Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions are too complicated for a short presentation; focus Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims The presentation makes insufficient use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation lacks focus on easy to understand evidence-based information about the topic Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider slowing down. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Reasonably good intonation The narration could benefit from further scripting and/or practice Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is reasonably well/poorly matched to the target topic. I recommend downplaying the general psychological theory about emotion and up-playing more targetted theory and research Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of mostly text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers decide whether or not to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:54, 3 November 2024 (UTC)