Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Neurohormones and emotion

Suggestions

Hey Alex,

From our chat earlier today in the tutorial I suggest that you organise your chapter by grouping the neurohormones by emotion (maybe a couple of the core ones). By putting them into groups it will allow you to go into more depth about what they do and how they relate to emotions than how you have currently got it set out. If you make these changes please be aware that you will need to change your focus questions too as what you will discuss/ answer will be slightly different from what you are at the moment. happy to help more if you need.

Ari --Ubaldo111 (discuss • contribs) 04:23, 26 September 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but aim for closer alignment 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Simplify/abbreviate the description of the problem/topic. Move detail into subsequent sections. Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Good balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed 5. Figure Excellent - One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented, captioned, and cited 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information Very good Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) 7. References No comment 8. Resources See also Excellent Use alphabetical order External links Excellent Use alphabetical order 9. User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making: comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:33, 27 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:53, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overly long Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Two scenarios are presented; simplify to one or move one into a subsequent section Explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions The first question is too broad; focus on unpacking the target topic Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained A clearer definition of a neurohormone would be useful Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., the ~1000 words about emotion). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) in some places Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate concepts in your own words Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Very good use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, mostly minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:53, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview The opening slide(s) conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/poor Recording volume was low Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The presentation is well/reasonably well/basically produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Good use of time codes An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link to the book chapter is not provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:51, 9 November 2024 (UTC)