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@Sophieteferi: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:53, 11 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

Hi Sophieteferi. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

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Topic development feedback

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  1. The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed)
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement
  3. Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  1. Basic
  2. Add an image to the scenario to help attract reader interest
  3. Move the description out of the feature box
  4. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  5. Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section
  1. Promising development of key points for each section
  2. Very good use of citations
  3. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  1. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) – more info
  1. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include initials)
  2. Conclusion is underway
  3. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is not presented and cited (see Tutorial 2)
  2. I think an uploaded image was delete due to copyright issues
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2)
  2. Basic use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages
  4. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  1. OK
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links
  4. Only include references which have been accessed and read
  5. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. alphabetical order
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
  1. See also
    1. One of two link types provided
      1. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02)
    3. Include source in brackets after link (e.g., (Wikipedia) or (Book chapter, year) for Wikiversity book chapters)
  2. External links
    1. Not developed (see Tutorial 2)
  1. Good
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making:
  2. One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making:

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:55, 1 September 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation
  1. The opening clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation
  2. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation makes reasonably good use of citations to support claims
  7. The presentation makes good use of examples
  8. The presentation provides basic practical advice
  9. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides an excellent summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The conclusion provides excellent take-home message(s)
  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well-paced
  4. Very good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was very good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is very good
  2. The presentation makes very good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in an very good way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  8. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Question mark missing.
  2. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers
  3. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:52, 10 November 2024 (UTC)Reply


Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an very good chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The style and learning features could be improved.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Move embedded external links to non-peer-reviewed sources into the External links section
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Reasonably good
  2. Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon
  4. The focus questions are clear and relevant
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds reasonably well on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Very good summary and conclusion
  2. Address the focus questions
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good but is below a professional standard in some aspects
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences.
    4. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter structure is underdeveloped; consider expanding
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity
      3. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
    2. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')
  4. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Figures
      1. Add captions
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example.
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)")
    3. Citations use basic/poor APA style (7th ed.). To improve:
      1. Integrate the citation into the sentence
      2. Do not include author first name or initials
      3. Move embedded links to non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed sources
    4. References are very messy. I've improved them a bit. To improve further:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Move non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section
  1. Very good/Good/Reasonably good/Basic/Insufficient use of learning features
  2. Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of figure(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. No use of feature box(es)
  7. No use of scenarios, case studies, or examples
  8. Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Rename links per Tutorial 02
    2. Use alphabetical order
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use bullet points per Tutorial 02
    2. Rename links per Tutorial 02
    3. Include sources in parentheses after the link
    4. Add more links
  1. ~5 logged, useful, minor to moderate contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:57, 12 November 2024 (UTC)Reply