Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Money and motivation

Suggestions and Feedback

Hi EmmanuelPaps,

Good job for starting this topic :) I'll make some edits on your chapter to fix your indenting. I've also added the subheading from the assignment list.

Some other suggestions are:

• You've got to include some focus questions in the overview - e.g. what are the primary goals/outcomes of your chapter?
• Refer to your figure 1 in the body of your chapter to get some extra points under 'figure' of the rubric
• An interesting learning feature could be how does money motivate us? - e.g. money serves to meet our basic needs (warmth, home, food, clothes) but also allows us to engage with things that bring us joy (like going overseas, guilty splurges). Alternatively you could have a textbox asking people to reflect on how money can both positively and negatively impact emotions.

I suggest shortening the case study to make it a bit easier to read - I'll copy some suggested words below. I'd also suggest connecting your image to the case study more - what is it about the coins that is relevant? You could refer it to as something like Figure 1: Is more money worth it?

Case study

Jasper works in coding and loves what he does. He has recently been offered a job with the Government - it's not interesting work, but it does pay almost double his current salary and offers financial security. He decides to accept the job.

After 3 months starts Jasper to dread going into work. He is already getting tired of his coworkers and finds the work boring. He used to love his job and although he is making more money, he is struggling to find motivation to work.

Goodluck with the assessment!

Mel U3225022 (discuss • contribs) 12:51, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Remove "Key points" heading Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., remove "us") Use correct spelling (e.g., affect vs. effect) 3. Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section 4. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. No development It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression such as checking grammatical and spelling errors Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented and captioned The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) 8. Resources See also One of two link types provided Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use alphabetical order External links Move Wikipedia link to the See also section Rename link so that it is more user-friendly. Include source in parentheses after the link. 9. User page Basic – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with indirect link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms such as the UCLearn discussion forum or on X using the #emot24 To add direct links to evidence: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:54, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

social contribution

hey, you have integrated several psychological theories into your chapter really well. this has added a lot of depth to your chapter. it would be interesting to know more about the long-term effect psychologically on an individual who is motivated by money. you have linked both extrinsic motivation and intrinsic motivation on money effectively great job so far :) U3236683 (discuss • contribs) 20:50, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds somewhat on Wikipedia articles; build more strongly on related book chapters Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Very good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good Some sentences could be explained more clearly (e.g., see the and tags) Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Crowding -> crowding) APA style Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use reasonably good APA style: Remove publisher location Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Basic use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:33, 21 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening slide(s) conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way The title is displayed and narrated The sub-title is not displayed and narrated Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic The presentation is very general The key finding that money is useful as a motivator up to a point (e.g., satisfying basic needs) but not much beyond (for motivating high level performance) is communicated in a basic way An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:55, 8 November 2024 (UTC)