Latest comment: 3 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic.
Consider integrating the religious and cultural section (e.g., tradition and ritual is often closely associated with religious); both of which are arguably a sub-set of social motivations
Excellent alignment between focus questions and heading structure
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Latest comment: 2 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hey Bianca,
Sorry to be a bit overbearing with grammar, but while I was reading through your chapter, I was captivated by it as a whole, and thought that the only issues I had with it was the capitalisations. Your piece is going to be really good once it's a bit more fleshed out, but thought I'd help out a little if I can :).
Latest comment: 1 month ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
Move embedded external links to academic articles into the References section, include links as dois, and provide APA style citation to the article in the main body text
Move embedded non-peer-reviewed links into the External links section
Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
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Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Very good use of feature box(es)
Very good use of case studies or examples
Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Check and correct capitalisation
Use alphabetical order
Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 1 month ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest
A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features)