Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Inner voice and emotion

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Refine the structure to remove repetition / provide more specific/distinct headings Remove heading for focus questions (incorporate into Overview) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings 3. Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Abbreviate the scenario (or split and distribute in more than one feature box throughout the chapter) A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Open-ended focus questions are usually better than closed-ended (e.g., yes/no) questions 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned The Figure 1 caption provides a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent 9. User page Good Brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence The other types of contribution are making: comments on chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:16, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Hi StephenBlume your book chapter is shaping up well, especially with its practical focus on how self-talk impacts emotions. Here are some of my feedback points:

The introductory cliffside hiking scenario powerfully captures attention and demonstrates how inner conversation may influence emotions in real time. However, while the beginning scenario is interesting, there is some confusion as the narrative alternates between positive and negative inner voices. It may be useful to consider breaking the process down into smaller, more manageable segments.

Your structure is clear, you break down the numerous parts of the inner voice and its relationship to emotions, making the information easier to understand.

Overall, this chapter is off to a strong start. Best of luck and I cannot wait to see the final result! - U3236641 --U3236641 (discuss • contribs) 12:04, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example) Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient/no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of examples The presentation provides basic practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Provide easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good It sounded like there was a faint beep in the background every now and then? The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider increasing line spacing to make the text easier to read Different font types are used (consistency) Direct quotes need page numbers The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:22, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and basic use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims In some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well The focus questions are excellent (clear and relevant) Theory A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds reasonably well on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Reasonably good use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Secondary citations are overused; strive to consult primary sources Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Insufficient integration with chapters Conclusion Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Insufficient integration with chapters Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are some aspects which are below professional standard Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see tags) by using a grammar checking tool, accessing UC services like Studiosity, and/or seeking peer feedback on draft work Check and correct use of that vs. who Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Check and make correct use of commas Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation – more info APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate about concepts in your own words Figures Reasonably well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, talics, check and correct capitalisation) Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use reasonably good APA Style (7th ed.): If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use excellent APA style: Learning features Good use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Good use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Reasonably good use of figure(s) Reasonably good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, mostly moderate contributions with direct links to evidence ~1 logged contributions without direct links to evidence Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:54, 25 November 2024 (UTC)