Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Dopamine fasting

My recommendation:

Hi @emdawson02! I really like your initial example of friend A and friend B, but I thought it could be even more engaging if you included an image of two friends to give the scenario some imagery :) Keep up the good work! Emeweme (discuss • contribs) 04:13, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Emdawson02. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:38, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

@Emdawson02: This is a reminder about the capitalisation of headings and sub-headings. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:42, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed) User name removed – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (expand) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections 3. Overview A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section Explain the connection between the scenario and the topic (DF and M/E) Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended These focus questions are too broad/unrelated to the target topic (see the sub-title and unpack it to allow you to synthesise the best psychological science that answers the sub-title question) 4. Key points Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations Too much about definitional/tangential matters; too little about the relationship between DF and M/E Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) but ideally make it more obvious how the scenario relates to a take-away message Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References Insufficient Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Check and correct APA referencing style: italicisation doi formatting Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic 8. Resources See also OK One of two link types provided Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Include "(Book chapter, year)" after links to other motivation and emotion book chapters on Wikiversity Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Use alphabetical order External links Not developed 9. User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with indirect link(s) to evidence The other types of contribution are making: direct improvements to other book chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:38, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter in terms of its readability and general theoretical background, but it provides insufficient integrated review of relevant research The chapter is written in plain language, which provides excellent readability There is some useful theoretical background More detail about dopamine fasting interventions would be useful More examples would be useful Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in many places (e.g., see the tags) There is insufficient critical review of relevant research Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained I didn't get a good sense of where "dopamine fasting" comes from and what its cultural history is from the way in which the concept was introduced. Ideally, provide more emphasis on dopamine fasting theory. A promising range of ideas are presented but it is not clear whether this material is derived from a first person reading of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) and move the current embedded external links to the External links section Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider using more. Research Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Basic use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Move links to non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged, minor social contributions with indirect links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:22, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation Overview The opening slide(s) conveys the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established through an example Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes good use of one or more examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Provide easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a very good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The visual communication could be improved by including relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation An excellent written description of the presentation is provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:13, 9 November 2024 (UTC)