Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Vocational identity

Initial suggestions

@U3171379: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Work
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:40, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Weak development Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Remove author names from headings (they are not that important) Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned This chapter plan could be strengthened by further developing the focus questions Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Use Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) Promising use of table(s)c. References Insufficient Poor APA referencing style Resources See also OK Also link to related book chapters External links Move academic sources into references and cite them Remove bold User page Good Created – minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution One type of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Hi,

Thank you for the feedback. I just have one question regarding the title section of the page.

What user name are you referring to? I do not have one listed on the page I am working on, in the title.

--U3171379 (discuss • contribs) 22:12, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

@U3171379: Sorry, that was erroneous feedback and has been removed. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:38, 30 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation I suggest splitting the title slide and learning outcomes into separate slides Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented I suggest narrating the learning outcomes Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The presentation could be strengthened by adding practical, take-home messages The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes effective/very good/good/reasonably good/basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced Reasonably good intonation Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is provided but it is not a legitimate license A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:11, 15 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes very good to excellent use of psychological theory but insufficient use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview cap Underdeveloped Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon It would be helpful to explain what VI is, with some examples Convert learning outcomes into focus questions Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory A very good to excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some citations are well used But, in other places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good to excellent summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good to very good Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Check and correct use of that vs. who APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99) Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct placement of full-stops References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~1 logged, useful social contributions with direct links to evidence ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess At least one of the uploaded images (File:Supers-Career-Development-Theory.jpg) seems likely to be copyright-restricted; I've nominated for deletion.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:44, 18 November 2023 (UTC)