Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Unemployment and mental health

Suggestion for linking topic with course content

Hey U3211780, great topic. When I saw this chapter title, I thought it could also be interesting to consider how being employed may have positive or protective effects on mental health. Perhaps it could be linked to the lecture 4 content that highlighted the value of autonomy, mastery and purpose. Have fun with the chapter. U3227759 (discuss • contribs) 13:45, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Feedback and suggestions

Hey! Thanks for picking such an important discussion.

I think what you have here is a really great start. You could benefit a lot by having topic questions to help guide you and provide structure to the chapter. An example could be:

1. How does unemployment affect mental health?

This way you can explore the relationship of unemployment and dive more deeply into how it affects mental health and why (using theories). You could also tie it together in the end and provide suggestions on how to mitigate the risk of developing mental health issues due to unemployment i.e. legally binding job security, access to healthcare and psych care, what support systems should we put in place for those who have just lost a job?

thanks and goodluck!!Dana --Dnamynts (discuss • contribs) 16:48, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:14, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing I like the practical emphasis - i.e., using theory and research to suggest practical changes Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add an image to the case study to help attract reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations Some claims lack sufficient citation Promising balance of theory and research. Ideally, synthesise and provide examples. It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan (e.g., are there any systematic reviews about this topic?) Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also OK Use internal link style (see Tutorial 02) External links OK Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter is now broken because it was set up on another user page - I've moved it to Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Unemployment and mental health Social contribution One type of contribution outside of own chapter Limited engagement Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established What country/countries is the unemployment statistic for? Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The audience is international, so internationalise the presentation. Australians are only .3% of world population. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory How do the different types of unemployment relate to mental health? The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes reasonably good use of citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well/reasonably well paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was poor (e.g., different volume levels, some static, keyboard clicks) Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time Consider increasing the contrast between font colour and background colour to make text easier to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided This presentation may have violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement Probably the images are freely available via the editing package but this is not explicitly stated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. This chapter could be improved by improving the writing style and taking account of earlier feedback Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Engage reader interest via a more readable/interesting case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Good/ depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Good integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Summarise key points Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic The target audience is international, not domestic. Australians represent only 0.3% of the world human population. I've removed the Australian-specific mental health services. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Abbreviations Spell out abbreviations on their first use, to explain them to the reader Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. For example, a space is needed after a period and before the start of the next sentence. Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99) Figures Most of the figures have been removed because of copyright violation Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Learn when to use parentheses and when not to use parentheses e.g., "Similarly, (Iversen & Sabroe, 1988)" should be "Similarly, Iversen and Sabroe (1988)" Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use very good APA style: Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than an em-dash (—) Learning features Insufficient use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Minimal use of image(s) No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Rename links and use internal linking style per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Move external links to the external links section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Select links for an international audience Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution No user page No logged social contributions

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