Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Firstly, great start to your book chapter. I have reviewed your case study and I have a few suggestions.
Review for typos - last paragraph
Consider revising third paragraph - for example, some word choice may include - making a firm commitment to overcome her addiction. She made several attempts to break free from drug addiction, including seeking help through rehabilitation and counselling.
Be specific about the intervention. Was the pivotal factor receiving counselling using the reframing technique within motivational interviewing?
I have done a quick browse of your topic development, and you do have some interesting ideas on how to tackle this topic.
I understand that your question focuses on treatment motivation for substance use disorders, so I thought why not include a short paragraph
on the causes of substance use. Why do individuals experience this in the first place? The reasons are endless, so feel free to focus on the ones that may interest you, or has deeper research!
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from being simplified to 2-levels (e.g., barriers/facilitators could be a top-level heading if integrated into focus questions
Consider unpacking top-level headings into sub-headings
The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings
Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Some of the comments that follow also relate to the structure/headings
Be more selective about the most relevant theories
Consider integrating discussion of relevant theories in subsequent sections and removing the "Motivational theories of addiction" heading
Avoid double-barrelled headings (e.g., "What are the different types of treatment interventions and why do they work?". Be selective about treatments; this section isn't required to answer the sub-title question. They can however serve as useful examples if they illustrate something about motivation
"Why is treatment motivation important ...?" might be better presented earlier
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
Conclusion (the most important section):
Well developed
But watch out for drift e.g., "which treatment interventions are the most successful for substance abuse disorder?" is not the topic
What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
Description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is a good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and basic use of research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
There is some scope/focus issue in that the chapter tends to focus on substance abuse treatment rather than concentrating on the best psychological theory and research about the motivational factors involved in successful substance abuse treatment. There is a subtle but important difference. And this chapter should be focused on the former rather than the latter.
The chapter seems to ultimately emphasise intrinsic motivation as the key component, but this seems to downplay how this can be facilitated and supported.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
Consider providing a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest
Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
Focus questions needs redevelopment to be more targetted at the topic, rather than tackling tangential issues e.g., I've reworded the first focus question
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences.## Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"
Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. guiding light) in science-based communication
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Very good use of case studies
Good use of feature box(es)
Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
Audio communication is well paced
Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
The narration is well practiced and/or performed
Audio recording quality was excellent
The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked sufficient synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Abbreviate title and/or sub-title to include question mark.
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