Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Tragic optimism

Initial suggestions

@Alice hatcher: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Optimism
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Psychological resilience
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:21, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:27, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for pointing that out James, I don't know why I capitalise every word . I will be sure to fix that! Alice hatcher (discuss • contribs) 12:47, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi Alice, This is a really interesting and important topic, I wonder if you could add a section under the fostering heading around the use of therapeutic approaches This article is an example of https://doi.org/10.1080/09515070.2019.1633497 integrating TO into other therapies. also don't forget to add some references before tomorrow, looking forward to seeing what you come up with. --U3209567 (discuss • contribs) 00:37, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Hey,

Thank you very much for your suggestion. Ive had a read and it shows to give me some great options to add to my chapter so thanks heaps!! goodluck with your chapter! Alice hatcher (discuss • contribs) 04:45, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi again Alice, Your progress is looking good, you are certainly covering a lot =). I have gone through and done some edits, mostly on spelling and occasionally on word choice or coherency See here . Just a tip writing things that people are going to read, try and say things in the simplest way possible, and avoid phrases like "in fact", as they are more phrases of speech, rather than of writing (or at least that is what I have found.) Look forward to seeing the final product. --U3209567 (discuss • contribs) 01:29, 4 October 2023 (UTC)

Hey, thank you so much for looking at my chapter, i really appreciate it. I will make sure to keep that in mind when editing my final Alice hatcher (discuss • contribs) 09:29, 4 October 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted The wording and/or capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. The wording and/or capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Remove user name – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history Headings Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from simplifying to a 2-level structure Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings in each section It makes sense to use the three sub-title questions as the top-level structure. So, I would probably reduce the historical section and incorporate the material into the "What is" section and/or other sections as appropriate. Remove colons from the end of headings Overview Put the scenario or case study at the start into a feature box (with the image - make it smaller) to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations The detail in the definitions and historical section will likely need to be reduced in order to focus effectively on the second and third questions. Otherwise this chapter will likely be over the max. word count of 4000 words counting everything. Emphasis contemporary applications (don't overdo the historical material, although it is obviously important) Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) and table(s) References OK Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation dois page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) External links Excellent OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:18, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

In-text referencing

@Alice hatcher:, I noticed some of your in-text references weren’t formatted according to APA 7. For example, (Leung, Arslan & Wong, 2021) should instead be written as (Leung et al., 2021). I flagged these in the chapter so hopefully that makes it easier to detect these minor errors. Your topic sounds interesting, I look forward to reading when you’re done! 😊 Emma

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It provides a good summary of Frankl's tragic optimism It could go further into the current psychological theory and research that can help to best understand the potential of tragic optimism For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario Also include a relevant image in the case study feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory This chapter provides a good to very good overview of tragic optimism theory Useful to distinguish between tragic optimism and toxic positivity It concentrates, however, too much on the historical aspects and too little on the theoretical aspects I would have liked to know more about the psychology of tragic optimism Builds somewhat on previous, related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Moderately well cited Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Summarise key points Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use serial commas[1]. See explanatory video (1 min) Figures Figures are briefly captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Table Good idea Provide a more detailed caption Layout/formatting makes it difficult to read Consider abbreviating Although there is limited work on TO I would like to see deeper connections made with related literatures and research Citation should be to Frankl (1946/1985) Do not include author first name or initials References use correct APA style Learning features Very good use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples Thanks for doing the poll and sharing the results Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use alphabetical order Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~19 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:47, 5 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Some citations are included to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Provide practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. The audience is international A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:13, 12 November 2023 (UTC)