Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Smiling and emotion

Initial suggestions

@U3230268: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Smiling
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:33, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3230268. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic There might some redundancy between "advantages" (2) and "benefits" (5) - consider reconciling Are there are downsides of smiling? Perhaps consider to add balance. Types of smiling might be a useful heading or sub-heading Section 6 re positive psychology may not be needed; but it can offer a useful framing Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Excellent A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Move the scenario ("Imagine you are walking home ...") into a feature box at the start to help catch reader interest. Add an image. Consider both how emotions impact smiling and how smiling impacts emotions Focus questions align well with top-level headings; but see comments in previous section about headings which may lead to adjusting focus questions Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Reduce/remove general description of positive psychology (just provide very brief introduction with link to further info). Concentrate direct on topic instead. Promising balance of theory and research Use APA style 7th ed for citations (e.g., First author surname et al. for 3 or more authors) Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Remove "illustration" from captions Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) External links Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution At least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:39, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Some focus questions are underdeveloped Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Consider adding a stronger emphasis on neuroscience aspects of smiling and emotion Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Some of the bullet-point material seemed incomplete Research Very good review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message Add practical, take-home message(s) about how to improve emotion through smiling Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full paragraph format Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Learning features Very good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Move external links to the external link section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:34, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Check and correct spelling e.g., cultrual, realtionship The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams and photos The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:21, 11 November 2023 (UTC)