Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Psilocybin assisted therapy and anxiety

Some initial suggestions

• This is a timely topic, thanks for taking it on
• Check out the previous psilocybin chapters here: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Drugs/Psilocybin and see how you might be able to build on, link to, integrate etc. this chapter with those other chapters
• Similarly, check the previous anxiety chapters here: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Drugs/Anxiety

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:10, 31 July 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi SammyTabrett. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Contribution & formatting suggestions

Hi Sammy! I thought I would leave a note here to let you know of the edits I made to your page for my social contribution. The main thing I did was just a few grammatical/spelling edits, and I also added a wikilink to the article on Psilocybe subaeruginosa. Check out the changes on the history page here.
I also suggest that you remove the link to your user page, and the social contributions section (as this should be on your user page itself), based on what James has told us so far in lectures/tutorials. I really enjoyed what you've written so far, and I'm definitely keen to see how this topic turns out as it's very interesting! --U3213682 (discuss • contribs) 05:59, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title was not correctly worded (fixed) Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Keep the initial sections about psilocybin assisted therapy and anxiety as separate sections brief. The main relevant material to address the sub-title will be theory and research about how and why psilocybin assisted therapy may be able to help people who have problems with anxiety. Be wary of addressing too much general or related material. Instead, mention briefly with relevant links to more info. In this respect, the key sections will be 4 and 5. Well developed 2-level heading structure, but not point above; may wish to abbreviate/rationalise non-core sections The Conclusion should not have sub-headings Social contributions should be on the user page Overview Reduce length of opening paragraph; create a more inviting start (e.g., be presenting a scenario/case study) Write for an international audience (Australians are only .3% of world population!) There seem to be two different sets of focus questions - integrate. The most relevant question is "How is psilocybin used a treatment for anxiety?". Other questions are tangential, so don't make them focus questions. Other relevant questions might be around the mechanisms of action, the evidence about efficacy etc. The most relevant external resources are likely to be about psilocybin and treatment of anxiety rather than being more generally about psilocybin etc. Key points None Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Not provided Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies References OK, but only reference seems to be about psilocybin assisted therapy and anxiety Each reference should be cited in the key points For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources See also Excellent The format for one Wikipedia link needs correcting External links Very good Ideally, concentrate on resources about psilocybin assisted therapy and anxiety Ideally, use sentence casing User page Very good Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:32, 14 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Strive for objectivity/balance (i.e., watch out for adopting an overly pro-stance unless there is clearly based on evidence) Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Perhaps there is room to explore how psilocybin therapy is specifically tailored to assist with anxiety - i.e., what is unique about using psilocybin to help deal with anxiety compared to dealing with other issues? Some of this is covered, but could go further (with less general psilocybin assisted therapy emphasis). Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Drugs/Psilocybin) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Some use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are mostly well referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Language is overly emotive/salesy Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid overly emotive language in science-based communication Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Abbreviations are probably overused; keep to a minimum Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Write numbers under 10 using words (e.g., five). Express numbers 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use almost correct APA style Check: List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Very good use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:26, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest Excellent to engage wide audience regarding everyday experience of anxiety A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes some implied use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Consider including key citations to support claims, especially as this is a new(ish), controversial(ish) topic/therapeutic approach Also consider mentioning issues, limitations, contraindications etc. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) Consider adding the take-home message(s) in text Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by incorporating more explicit synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes creative use of stock video and images The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by synthesising the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A rich written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:31, 8 November 2023 (UTC)